Black Poetry : the sum of you...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by IfUComeSoftly, May 31, 2006.

  1. IfUComeSoftly

    IfUComeSoftly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When the west indies took a second power from the motherland and...
    the sum of us, one heart, and four pair plus one tyring to make it in this life
    equals anything and everything i've ever dared dream into existence
    you're like my favorite dress when the silkiness slides down mi cuerpo
    covering me where i want and concealing me where i need
    surrounded in the fabric of him, us, and love; i'm no longer naked
    because the west indies took a second power from the motherland and...
    the sum is protection... the sum is love... the sum is the very air i breathe
    the sum and it's reciprocal will always be... YOU
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ahhhhh! how this coverd me in da essence of warmth
     
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    black_soul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow hot drop poet. thanks for sharing
     
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    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nice!
     
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    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh my...now this is one beautiful piece. Very original in flavor and effectively putting the reader where you wanted them to be...captivated by a painting of words...wow.
     
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    love how you put it down sis. miss ya!:hearts2:
     
  7. IfUComeSoftly

    IfUComeSoftly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rich, Cursed, Joyce, Nevar, Black Soul... thank you so much for the love... it has a hidden meaning that's why it doesn't make as much sense off top... lol.... anyhoo... all of you all are true poets... i am merely a novice... i am honored by your praise...
     
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    likewise sista likewise ......much love to ya !
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    "you're like my favorite dress when the silkiness slides down mi cuerpo
    covering me where i want and concealing me where i need
    surrounded in the fabric of him, us, and love; i'm no longer naked..."

    another brilliant simile, ifyoucome......the gift...the gift
    im trying to hold it back....im tryin.....