Black Poetry : The Stone Path

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  1. Archival

    Archival Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she looked down at the small stone path
    that ran below her bare feet
    to keep her safe from the wild ground
    she always noticed it's intricate workings
    the stones hand picked to be placed there
    with warmth radiating off to warm her
    each one smooth with worn off edges
    knowing the path would never leave her
    as she wandered further into the world
    it always lead her away from danger
    and only ran under blue skies
    but with time she forgot it was there
    taking for granted it's faithful ways
    she stepped upon it without care
    for the path had always been there
    but the path remained most the same
    maybe a little bigger
    wider shoulders to stand upon
    with rest spots along the way
    built of sweat and stones and tears
    the sacrifice always there beneath her
    in a selfless act of caring
    the path knew it would run forever
    hoping one day to be noticed again
    and appreciated for it's every curve
    as it held her just a little higher
    off the ground



    Infrequently Soulful,
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome drop where u been happy to feel ya pen again !
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awesome you took me in with this one....wel ldone poet!!!
     
  4. Archival

    Archival Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you know me, always infrequent

    Just been so busy, I want to visit more but it's crazy out here, all work and no play. Guess it pays off in the long run.

    Had that one wrote inside my mind on the drive home a few days ago Flow to the under appreciated.


    Infrequent, as always,
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sort of like not missing the water until your well runs dry...I really liked the metaphor of the path in this, and the way it led us through this piece. Well done.
     
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    Nice work poet...
    love the imagery
    ...this would
    make a great
    short story....

    Keep it flowin poet!
     
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    that was real......dang! no other words sorry, just real. wow!
     
  8. Archival

    Archival Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    for those who understand

    Thanks...

    Sometimes we are all the stone path, and we just wish the person walking on our shoulders would look down to see.

    Maybe then they would understand the depth of our love, the sacrifice and the meaning.

    May your path always be with you, if you have found it.


    Infrequently Soulful,
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    a moment to lean on thee
    this is a wonderful script
    watching and feeling
    the path
    wonderful flow

    Blue:heart:
     
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