Black Poetry : the sky is bloodshot

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  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the sky is bloodshot from crying
    wetting wings of butterflies
    that spiral downward like
    the tears of stillborn fetuses
    they fall at my barefeet...
    causing the earth to cough up
    nightcrawlers that squirm
    looking for a better tomorrow...
    tired of cultivating soils where
    broken treaties are buried and souls
    impale the roots of cotton plants

    the clouds don't move anymore
    they hang there watching days pass
    as there future shrinks like shadows
    on cornered blocks and shadows
    spread eagle by their future
    hopes lips are sutured shut cause it
    talked too much

    talking about a sunrise that ghetto eyes
    can't realize
    while nightcrawlers are disfigured
    by boot stomps because the past don't matter
    in the ghetto only the death stenched today
    is reality

    (c)2002 blakverb
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    verb ya masterpiece speak loud and free man tyght flow!
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well all-right now!! This is definitely a deep scribe... the last stanza really has some lines that draw a reader in for a
    full reflection of the entire piece....

    I really enjoyed this piece!

    N2 :)
     
  4. Danilyn

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    Whoa! Blak, allow me to now bestow on
    you the raised fist award for excellence.
    The visuals and imagery in this peace are
    madd tight, along with a very deep, poignant
    message. I've missed ya, Blak! Glad to see ya
    back in full force! :)
     
  5. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Verb.


    ...just like always, once You enter the room the entire
    dynamic tends to change. & once you exit... no one is
    quite the same... :)
    (that's how reading this piece made me feel!! )

    :heart:
    Elayne.
     
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    Blak!!

    I see u doing yo thang Poet!
    Deep piece here!
    Thanks for the read!!:rolleyes:
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICH$$ - brother, as always thanks for the comps

    N2 - thank ya homegirl

    Dani - Queen thanks for the award :)

    GA - "Queen of Love" you are much to kind. I am humbled by your words.

    Rashad - thanks brother. no doubt.