Black Poetry : The saddest line, I cannot write

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by angelicsage, Jun 25, 2003.

  1. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 30, 2003
    Messages:
    5,322
    Likes Received:
    38
    Location:
    ~The hidden library...~
    Ratings:
    +39
    This night I seek the light
    Resistant to the saddest line,
    my soul would have me write
    This night, I’ve shed the longest tear
    Smothering, deepest, mournful cries
    from listening, watchful ears

    The dawning of this pensive day
    paraded the glory of fiery, golden rays
    Nostalgic forests of you and I
    were quickly set ablaze
    and
    The final leaf of autumn falls
    Hence the wretchedness of this
    bittersweet night, wistfully began it’s call

    This night my void is deep, gaping, weeping
    and bleeding within the walls of my heart, you see
    Unforgiving is your memory
    Even more immense this night
    Therefore, I must seek the light
    In resistance to the sorrowful, mourning lines
    my soul would have me write

    I am not satisfied and there is unrest
    A swallowed silence in the wind tonight
    I cannot bring these lonely hands to write,
    the saddest line tonight

    Your presence is no longer, this is true
    no embrace of consolation for my longing
    to submerge into, I have lost you
    And you have lost me, too

    Tonight I seek the light
    Tonight I seek flight

    There is no other…there will never be
    another

    This saddest line, I finally write

    Copyright © 2003
    All rights reserved.
     
  2. Soullyricist

    Soullyricist Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jun 23, 2003
    Messages:
    64
    Likes Received:
    0
    Ratings:
    +0
    I like this piece...very tranquil and full of emotion..you expressed if very well...nice write
     
  3. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Jan 14, 2003
    Messages:
    6,642
    Likes Received:
    539
    Gender:
    Male
    Occupation:
    Poet
    Location:
    The Lone-Star State
    Ratings:
    +604
    Honestly, you have a great piece to work with here.
     
  4. Rico

    Rico Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 30, 2003
    Messages:
    174
    Likes Received:
    0
    Occupation:
    Computer Geek
    Ratings:
    +0
    I like this one...alot of feeling.
     
  5. Sierra

    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 10, 2003
    Messages:
    636
    Likes Received:
    0
    Occupation:
    writer
    Location:
    Ohio
    Ratings:
    +0
    Hi,

    I really like this. I love the flow, emotion of your words and the keen sense of imagery.

    It is a very nice piece.

    "Tonight I see the light. Tonight I seek flight. There is no other...There will never be another. This sadddest line, I finally write."

    These lines for me say it so well!! Beautiful poem!!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
  6. ASHANTA

    ASHANTA Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Jan 15, 2003
    Messages:
    1,859
    Likes Received:
    69
    Location:
    Brooklyn N. Y.
    Ratings:
    +70
    Words of a master poet.
     
  7. skrybe7

    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Feb 11, 2003
    Messages:
    1,360
    Likes Received:
    2
    Ratings:
    +2
    Masterful and emotive
    very sad piece, Angelicsage.
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 30, 2003
    Messages:
    5,322
    Likes Received:
    38
    Location:
    ~The hidden library...~
    Ratings:
    +39
    Soullyricist, thanks so much for dropping me a line.

    1poetsought, always happy to hear from you.

    Rico, nice seeing you again, Thanks.

    Sierra your words are so kind, thank you!

    Ashanta, Master poet? Why thanks!

    Skrybe, Thanks for the feedback and yes I agree, it is a little sad...

    Big, Big Thanks to all of you who took the time to write, your feedback is greatly appreciated! Much Luv to all of you.
     
  9. Alizentang

    Alizentang Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jun 23, 2003
    Messages:
    607
    Likes Received:
    3
    Occupation:
    Nurse
    Location:
    Milwaukee, WI
    Ratings:
    +3
    This piece tugged on my heartstrings a little. Truely beautiful. I like the tone. I also like your descriptiveness. You never cease to amaze me.
     
  10. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Apr 8, 2003
    Messages:
    2,752
    Likes Received:
    28
    Gender:
    Female
    Occupation:
    Educational/Human Resources field
    Location:
    Chicago, IL
    Ratings:
    +28
    Dang....deep :toast:...
     
Loading...