Black Poetry : the reflection of a younger me (repost)

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  1. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the younger me--
    hid behind what he did not know
    spoke in third person--
    when he did not know the meaning
    he was ridiculed for being himself
    i loved that kid.

    he was killed.
    trampled by opinion.
    stabbed with jealousy.
    beaten repeatedly with hatred.

    the rain sent him to Heaven--
    leaving me--here.

    I step
    outside
    myself
    because I am not...myself--
    sorrry if you can't comprehend...
    I just had to tell you.
    and you.
    and you.

    This new guy--
    he lives for ridicule...he laughs at it
    stares at opinions.
    walks head-held-high...
    away from jealousy.
    he lets hatred slither down his back.
    ultimately
    hitting
    the
    ground.

    I love this kid.

    ~espee manifested~
     
  2. MapleXtract

    MapleXtract Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    See what I mean?

    All that depth, pa. This one is, definitely, felt. A, very, thorough metaphor, poet... *feelin this*
     
  3. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SEAN....

    i can dig it... yes indeed!!

    although i regret not having had the chance
    to meet the "younger You"... before he went away...

    i am honored that i have been given the opportunity
    to experience the "New Guy" he left behind... :)

    thank you for sharing this peace...

    AlwaysLove...
    SUNshyne~
     
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    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Maple and SUNshyne...

    what great compliments to each other...maybe i'll write sumpfin 'bout that!

    sean
     
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    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hello, Hello!

    I'm chessin' cause this one is especially pleazin'--well done--taking a poetic step outside of yourself and looking back--love that kid too--this is special--Amun-Ra


    Check out Amun-Ra's new column "Fight the Power"
    at http://destee.com/forums/showthread.php3?threadid=1048
     
  6. Hunter

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    You washed me with your Rain Sean
    But I don't mind the liquids
    If the water
    Renders you
    "Born again" :)

    Very insightful piece poet!

    *born-agRAIN*
     
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    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hunter and Amun-ra

    thanking you both to take time out and read some of my stuff...As you all are my reason for writing!


    sean.
     
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