Black Poetry : The red eye

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by shaz, Apr 10, 2002.

  1. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Looking around I see the dimly lit eyes
    In the dimly lit caves watching
    The dim-witted slaves
    Slaves to the money not a one of them saves
    Money that brings both the watched and the watcher closer to there graves

    Welcome to the fast lane
    Where the passage of time is more than a notion of the distant inevitable
    But here time sits at your back watching your every move
    Panelizing your every motion as you take another sip of vision and delusion
    You drink internal rust from a glass or a bottle
    No matter the size or shape its all just a throttle
    Speeding you on your way to that judgment day

    Time is patient though
    not worried a bit
    Cus your in his world now! so take another sip
    Oh snap big willy Is that a cigarette you lit
    You my kinda a ***** not worried a bit

    Eye drops a fresh cut, new suit and some crisp dolla bills
    Help to camouflage the signs of weary on your heels
    But keep f***ing around and soon you will look like the others
    In the round
    Or should I say
    In The ground
     
  2. Rashad

    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm diggin the flo!!

    This piece brings about several messages to the mentals and I can dig that!! Tyte Scribe here Poet!! Tyte!!
     
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    brotherman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dat's right, well said cause our actions brings reaction and time can be an enemy or friend depending on the sinning...feel ya' shaz.
     
  4. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rashad
    thank you for the read

    brotherman
    that monster time is something else, thanks for the read
     
  5. GYPSYMAN

    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is tyght az hell...you dropped...

    "you drink internal rust from a glass or a bottle
    no matter the size or the shape its all just a throttle
    speeding you on your way to that judgement day"



    ...deep lines right here bro. Shaz...cold drop !!

    peace
    g-man
     
  6. Nia Maishani

    Nia Maishani Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm here to tell you, this peace has convinced me that I need to spend a lot more time in this forum. What a SCRIBE! Shaz, you have insanely tight skills.
     
  7. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GYPSYMAN
    thank you for the read, real glad you liked it

    Nia Maishani
    Much thanks, really appreciating the comments