Black Poetry : The Real Soul Behind The Wall

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a poem i wrote like last year i think! :crying:



    A heart that has been broken and can never be mended.
    A sharp dagger piercing through the veins that severe right down to the bone.
    A tear that falls from the eyes and soon many more will follow.
    The heart fears it will never beat or love again.
    The veins afraid that the blood will flow right out of the body.
    The tears afraid that they will have to keep flowing for all eternity.
    But what is the part that is most afraid?
    For it is the eyes.
    The eyes have to see the world changing before it.
    They see the changes happening within themselves and can only watch everything until they all shrivel to dust.
    But here’s the worst part of the eye.
    The eye is the window to the soul.
    If that is so true then the only one that has broken our heart, pierced through our veins, and made one tear become a flood will know what is happening within us.
    Why can’t our eyes have shutters upon them so we could hide all the chaos and despair that is happening in our souls?
    Why can that one person know about the battles with one glance?
    Everyone tries to hide it but the eyes don’t have any defenses against anyone that will hide the pain.
    They have to be there for the others to look into them and let all the secrets out of the soul.
    Our souls are supposed to be a great mystery to others who wish to seek out all the answers.
    But, with one glance that one so called special person can tear down all the walls, look past our masks, and see the real us who we try to hide from all who seek the soul.



    (c) 2002
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep within da soul one known who thy be this was a deep piece
    flow on
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very deep piece...speak on..nice write
     
  4. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thnx ya'll that means alot to me! :hot:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Although this was a sad piece, I appreciated the descriptive way you posed this....especially the way you went into how the eyes reveal so much. Great write.
     
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    indeed most welcome from da heart continue on
     
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    good points, and right on point. the eyes tell all. flow on, girl.
     
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    This was tight
    Deep but stunning
    Sad but opening
    Loved It
     
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    the eyes reveal ya soul
    they are windows without any concealing
    The eyes are truth that don't lie
    so precious are you though
    through it all your soul will survive
    don't give up
    don't believe they hype
    dust yaself off
    and smile again
    forgiveness helps the pain to let go
    to move on again

    loved this peace....sounds like something i would write.. i'm just loving. stay encouraged. everybody has had a broken heart but you find realness and newness that belongs to u and u find pride.. thanks again D.S.
     
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    i felt every emotion when reading your words. this was very deep and touching flow on poet.:spinstar: :spinstar:
     
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