Black Poetry : The Rapper

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by rhymebad, Dec 17, 2010.

  1. rhymebad

    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The Rapper

    His rhymes mixed and mind fixed with crazy glue and his
    Girl have a baby too can only afford gravy and stew, Liz
    And he in an affair falsely and she prepare coffee by brewing
    Extract flavor while he had a whack behavior, but just screwing
    And kissing Liz lips at night, on the streets bossy, speak softly
    This freak falsely ran game and planned lame things so costly
    To his career as he teamed up with a sad crew and this add to
    His failure, departed real onto fake started to make cold hearted
    Deals which led to gun toting he became a beast wrecked out smarted
    Himself this had an increased effect on his life arrested and locked up
    From a block corrupt, no longer a guy free to a high degree shocked but
    His fault he got caught selling drugs and dwelling with thugs bad luck
    And now he ducks all the time this is the result of crime prevails in
    Strife dealing with jail life no microphones he demonstrate ability
    And ready to penetrate a facilty of rappers with skills straight silly
    He succeeded at rap easily but continued to do crap sleezy and now
    Trapped on a measly crime, songs he sing a few wore bling true somehow
    it cling to his neck, while his vesrses stem nice, imprecise but fairly
    close to dope each post he hope to reach folks as some are dumb and barely
    understand this, his brain a mess wanted to attain success reach desired
    goal this required bold concentration but he failed to do no longer admired
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    gettin it in ..........tyte flow
     
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    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah rich thanks I really tried to that
     
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    I didn't like this to be honest, you need to work on flow and coherency, you have good ambition though.
     
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    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey cade foster if you don't like mine then drop your own verse, show me what you got anybody can talk
     
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