Black Poetry : The Race: Love versus Mass Transit (ruff cut/first draft)

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  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sitting in an oxygen deprived choked position
    cramped next to someone who needs two
    extra stops to have time to get up

    sitting here wondering if
    Love can get down to sounds of
    mass transit

    exhaust spitting carcinogens into sun dipped days
    hazing us into it's existence like military officers who
    puncture skin with pins of honor(?)

    our lungs are scarred

    "Yo, I need a transfer" some "i ned attention"
    young...cat professes to the stir of no one /
    but//love notices that "condition" has scrawled
    a scowl across his face
    can't erase the feeling of being "dis" placed
    into a pigeon hole of sparrow ****

    all this and i wonder if Love can get
    down with mass transit

    or does it need a double overhead cam
    turbo charged cherry apple red beauty
    that in 4.2 seconds can go from zero to sixty

    to breathe

    i figure love may get scarred by too many
    stories best reserved for late night talk
    insight into dysfunctional lives for ratings

    ...it didn't ask to hear about the bar B Que
    that ****** received when he got out
    of jail..a **** reception for a rapist..or the Negro
    who 'smacked a *****" cause she questioned a
    questionable manhood...or a hood who's lost in the hood
    even though he knows...what corner to hang on
    while his mind hangs from a tree

    love's been staring me in the face
    with questions i can't answer
    but if love took residence within me
    i wonder if it could outlast this race...or do i need to be
    in a double overhead cam
    turbo charged
    cherry apple red beauty
    that in 4.2 seconds goes from zero to sixty
     
  2. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Applause on this ruff cut/first draft...

    Tight ta death mental Blakman!!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
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    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice Blak!!

    I tell ya tho, it's amazing what a little sincere love can do...
    Tyte Scribe!
     
  4. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    my royal BLak-NeSs.


    as usual... you are up to great things! :D

    this heah peace reminded me of the opening
    line of musiq's song... "love, there's so many
    things i want to tell you"...

    anyway... thank you for gracing us with your
    royal BLak presence.

    :heart:,
    elayne.
     
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