Black Poetry : The Proposal

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  1. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The Proposal

    I stood there, watching you
    And came to the realization
    That you are everything
    I’ve ever wanted in a woman
    I can’t even begin to explain
    How just by standing here
    I know that you are the One
    It’s the essence that you posses
    The feelings that I get
    When you are near me
    It’s the thoughts that I have
    About you every day
    And the dreams I dream
    When you are on my mind

    I can not promise you the world
    Or even give you every earthly possession
    All I can offer and give
    Is my heart, my soul, and my life
    I can not phantom life without you
    So I ask you
    Will you be my best friend, my lover,
    And mostly and importantly my wife
    I’m not expecting an answer today
    There is no pressure, so please
    Take your time
    And maybe one day you’ll sing a song
    By Floetry and just “say yes”


    I didn’t know how I felt
    Until just this moment in time
    While I stood there watching you
    Knowing that I want you to be my wife
    Cause life without you is just not complete
    So think and take your time
    Cause Mami, my heart is yours to keep
    And thank you in advance
    My future wife​
    .
     
  2. iwannabe

    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was good. nicely written. I liked the very conversational tone of it, made it seem so honest and real. Heartful. Nice...
     
  3. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow, thank you I appriciate the love.
     
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    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Another slam dunk :bball: ! Your heart runs deep poet, Keep flowing!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    on one knee.......this was as smooth , deep and warm fill with love
    awesome tyte proposal she can't say no ! to this.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i likes i likes very nicely posed...hope she says yes....
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Genuinely felt poem about a love that you can feel right down to the bottom of your heart. Sweetly endearing poet.
     
  8. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for all the love but the poem is just a thought of what I might say to that lady when I meet her
     
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    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I just wanted to tell everyone that I appriciate all the kind words.
     
  10. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :jump: I like this poem cuz i can see there's a piece of u etched in the words...whoever u do give this to...they'll be receiving ur all...what a wonderful scribe...

    keep the flow goin
     
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