Black Poetry : The Promise

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  1. EbonyQueen06

    EbonyQueen06 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He promised when I turned he'll take me away
    He'll take me away from my mama demons
    He'll take me away from my step father's beating
    He'll take me away.
    I wait inside this beautiful April morning
    because I have to baby-sit my motha
    I call and tell him I can't wait to see him again
    I watch out for a unfimilar car that's strange to me
    I run to his arms, hug him and shead a tear as I do
    He looks like me;
    Ebony eyes
    thick hair
    and same gap tooth smile
    Yes he's my father
    A wrongly accused man of drug pocession
    caused by my motha
    He looks @ me like I was the best thing he created
    My father dressed in vanilla icecream color suit and shoes to match
    Dropped of all charges
    It took over 8 years
    I see him shead a tear.
    He hugs me again
    "I miss u so much I wish I could've been there to protect u"
    He states
    "It's okay I still love u anyway daddy"
    He breaks down crying again.

    He promised when I turned he'll take me away
    He'll take me away from my mama demons
    He'll take me away from my step father's beating
    He'll take me away.

    I never relize how short it was goin to be
    We lived togather and had my own room
    with no Newport smell and whinno sharing a bed wit me
    I was happy finnally to be a family.
    Me and my daddy
    Till the my motha came and shot and killed him accidently
    trying to kill herself and torture his mind
    He promised when I turned he'll take me away
    He'll take me away from my mama demons
    He'll take me away from my step father's beating
    He'll take me away.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow deeply felt this emotion flowing openly of a love it save u
    awesome write flow on !
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    no words come to me
    only emotions rapid like the see
    seeing ebony
    thank you for be..ing
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow....an eden that should have lasted a while, only momentarily lived. Your words grabbed me, and held me in. Flow on poet.
     
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    This is heart wrenching and well told
     
  6. EbonyQueen06

    EbonyQueen06 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    as always thank-u u give me confidence as a writer with everyone's apreciation
     
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    I am taken away by the sheer power of this poem.
     
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    ...the voice, thoughts, heart
    and endless hopes
    of a child, lost in a world
    they cannot control

    gripping piece...
     
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    speechless

    Your words were so heartfelt that I'm just a bit listless at this time. Very good prose.
     
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