Black Poetry : The Promise Of Africa

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  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she felt that "something"
    coming on again
    it always started in the pit
    of her stomach and then
    her head would get all light
    and dizzy
    every time leon sutterfield came
    whistling down the street

    she felt that something

    ****! she wondered
    if he felt it too
    wondered if his knees
    went all rubbery
    if he felt like he couldn't
    hold it any longer

    she got the wiggles really
    bad whenever he got close
    like out of no where she
    had to pee

    she felt so dumb
    she was 16 but so
    uncool

    leon smiling and whistling
    made her weak
    and she couldn't breathe

    he was such a good-looking boy
    the other girls didn't like him
    he wasn't high yella, didn't have
    that curly hair

    but he was the finest thing
    she had ever seen

    his skin the color of
    warm molasses just
    did something extra exciting
    setting off those beautiful
    white teeth of his

    he talked low and deeper
    than the other boys
    kinda soft spoken like,
    kinda shy

    and he walked with
    a rhythm that made her
    hear those drums

    always, she heard the drums
    like that time they had
    the movie about Africa at
    school

    that was leon sutterfield

    lee-onn sut-ter-fee-illld

    she liked stretching out his name
    she liked putting her first name
    in front of his last name

    to her

    he was Africa
    he was Beauty
    he was Mysterious
    he was Rhythmic
    he was Sweet

    she could just tell he was good & sweet
    like what some of the older girls
    would say....like they tasted
    their men....

    he was her
    Africa

    and she felt that something
    creeping up inside of her
    and the flush rose from her
    knees up to her thighs

    when leon gave her that honey-dripping
    smile her heart jumped
    out of sync
    and her cheeks blushed up

    it was a feeling she tried
    with all her might to cling to
    long after he passed on by

    ...boy smiled
    like he knew something
    like he felt that something, too

    leon smiled a promise
    she heard deep in her heart
    that day

    as she watched him go past
    strutting with quiet confidence...
    she knew
    he would be the King
    who would lead her by the hand
    and together they would discover
    the untold treasures of
    Africa


    Alyce (c) 2002
     
  2. ShadeeLadee

    ShadeeLadee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This reminds me of dreams that escaped me, once upon a time. You brought some of them back. It wasn't so long ago, after all.
    Means more than my jumbled words can say at this time of night.

    thank you

    S~M :heart:
     
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    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...>floats in all wobbly>

    Now this takes me back many years to the moment when I first felt something. And I didn't know quite what that "something" was, or where it came from.

    I have read many poems dealing with the subject of first love or crush or whatever you wish to call or label it as. But this is a first, truly, because it combines that first love with roots and culture. It blends the two themes together smooth and tenderly, like a seamstress, using two different colors to make a dress. Here you have given us a picture of a first love and also self love; the joy and love of being black. The girl's theme is that of discovery-first love. Leon is that love of self and the joy and confidence it brings when you truly know who you are. The poem itself, speaks of black love.

    This is a very lovely poem. It moves and touches the heart, at least for me. But what really adds to the flame and the passion, is, the language. Nothing fancy or over-the-top. No lengthy cliched phrases. Just simple direct words, that waste no time in setting up or getting the point across. I also really love the way you tied the title into the poem. "The Promise of Africa"- "Leon smiled a promise"...and "she knew he would be the King who would lead her by the hand and together they would discover the untold treasures of Africa."---BEAUTIFUL!

    I enjoyed every word of this. Thanks for the inspiration.

    <floats out shakened<...
     
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    Alyce...

    Very nice piece...
    thanx for sharing.


    Epiphany :heart:
     
  5. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sustah A

    You have definitely written an eye-opener here with this piece... Hell at one point I was sayin' I want me some of that **** Leon Sutterfield...:lol: You made the images appear right before my eyes and collectively represented Africa through this high yellah fellah from deep within' the roots of this piece...

    Tyte scribe ~ (but I expect nothin' less from a seasoned poet such as yourself!!)

    :) Well Well Well......done!

    N2
     
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    the beginnings of love...is a beautiful time...as wishful thinking takes one on journeys to and fro...before you know, the fantasies are real.

    THANKS Sistah A.
     
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    Alyce,

    Perfect 10 piece!!!!

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    WOULD LOVE TO HEAR
    AS WELL AS READ THIS
     
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    Alyce dis be well felt i hear da drumbeat of love rappin at
    da brisk of winds flowin .......ya pen full of ink!
     
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    to the motherland
    the birth place of man
    the treasures in the real garden
    feeling the love and spirit in this

    lovedided it
    dssNY
     
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