Quiet Poetry Lounge : The Point

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by alter, Jun 19, 2003.

  1. alter

    alter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    At what point was the line
    Crossed
    When you and I did what we
    Shouldn't've done
    When I spoke those words acknowledging
    That you were the One
    When we did the deed that ended up being
    More than just
    Innocent
    Fun

    At what point did we lose sight
    Of the lives we've lived
    The Dreams we've dreamt
    The love we've had squandered and lost
    To find this place
    This wasted Land of Uncertainty
    Of sliding eyes and whispered
    Lies
    Of nights spent separated by
    Too many words
    Trying to count herds of sheep
    To keep from
    Weeping

    At what point did we decide
    That we would ride this thing out
    Till the end
    Whatever that meant or
    Whatever the Future
    Portends
    That we would go for it
    See if what we feel is real
    **** the world
    We only live one life
    Ride or die
    I really really need you
    Tonight

    At whatever point it was that we
    Did what we did
    Now it's done and we're both running
    From the consequences of our
    Actions
    Trying to hide our dishonesty not only from
    Ourselves but from each other
    As well

    Trying to pretend like those secret conversations
    Where we talked about true love and human relations
    Were really just fantasy discussions
    That we were really just close
    Trying to get the most out of our time together since
    No one knows the future and we must have been
    Soulmates in some other life cause we really relate
    Like we've known each other
    Forever or
    Whatever

    Attraction comes in so many shades
    In waves of blue and gray
    Its call leads to the fall of conscious action sometimes
    You can't rewind and replay the scene trying to figure out
    What you really mean
    Or meant by those words
    Cause they're gone
    The moments we shared relegated to the threats of the
    Comically-ensnared
    Captured by their inability to deal with life in this world
    Or really and truly feel
    What another person's going
    Through

    But that's the really real
    The unspoken curse behind every bad luck deal struck
    By every Conspirator of Lust who has ever lived
    To give her or his gift to the Omniverse
    To share that special understanding that exists between
    Souls of Light
    All Soldiers in the battle of the New World
    Drawn together
    No hurled
    Into each other's Spheres of
    Consciousness
    To share their special and individual Fates
    Trying to relate

    It is at this point the Truth can finally be seen
    That our worlds are nothing but the Dreams
    Of diseased and wounded minds
    Finding echoes of kind
    In the colorful yet sordid lines of braille-like
    Complexity the last Secret Language of the
    Emotionally blind
    Truth being relative it becomes easy to find
    Excuses for our actions and thoughts
    The vagaries of the Human Condition sought
    Throughout time and space
    Until finally arriving at this very special
    Place

    The singularity of preternatural Existence
    An infinitesimal mass of primal Consciousness

    That halcyon moment of Genesis

    A Seed in the creative Void

    That beautiful
    Magical
    Point

    When we fell in
    Love
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ujmmmmmm im love this!! i feel you ,how i feel ya :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyteeeeee scribe in motion
    dis was awesomeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!
    flow on ....
     
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    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi Alter,

    I like this very much. It is well written and you have a beautiful sense of imagery. :toast:

    I am glad you shared this one!!

    All my best to you!!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
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    wow ..very deep...wonderful flow
    Peace
     
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    Your words just poured..."True Soul Mates"
    Beautiful flow.
     
  7. alter

    alter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank y'all for the read...:)
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That intangible thing, love.

    You nailed it!
     
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