Black Poetry : The Poem I wish she wrote

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  1. Mikha'el

    Mikha'el Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ighty y'all back with another :) this poem is one me n a friend wrote ( i don't have her verse) in this one me n her (in this case me) switch roles n write from the other's point of view n write down what we wanted the other person to say (me n the girl used to mess with each other n still do)...its a summary of what occured up untill the time this was written...enjoy

    I wish you knew how I felt for you back then

    If you did then wouldn’t be no talk of friends

    But now we both looking at a dead end

    We both looking at the fact that this maybe the end

    Back then I was feeling you like crazy

    I used to think about the day that I could call you my baby

    But sad to say that u ain’t feel the same way

    And as things got deeper u started acting brand new

    Got me thinking wtf did I do to you

    U started acting disrespectful and ignorant got me feeling like ****

    Now im sitting here at an all time low

    Got me wanting to just crawl into a hole didn’t know that you were so cold

    Worst part about being that I cared and felt for you

    And you didn’t care for me how foolish could I be

    To keep giving you chances when u ain’t deserve them

    Now all of a sudden you have a change of heart

    Now u wanna get to know me whereas before u didn’t give a ****

    I should say no but in my heart I still feel for ya

    So I give you a chance for you to show ya true colors

    Come to fnd out that maybe you aren’t a heartless soul

    That maybe after all that this can work maybe we can be together

    Or so I think but unfortunately I can’t let go

    Of the things u said to me in our past

    Sorry to say although u got me feeling some type of way

    It’s best that we remain friends
     
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    Sometimes, it's best to just let bygones be bygones/let sleeping dogs lie.


    This was so relatable.

    Nice piece!
     
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    thank you :)
     
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    i agree with cherryblossom this piece is so relatable!
     
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    Hello Mike...

    Yep to what Cherry said, because next time 'round could make you enemies.


    Enjoyed the flow! Thank you.


    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:
     
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    I can relate so well, things happen for a reason and people last for a season. I find this to be so true. Loving this Mike!!!!!!!
     
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    Mikha'el Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Ladies :)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    word of advice i agree to what da ladies said.....I feel ya Mike
     
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    Flow on poet. I even respect the actually act of portrayal in reallife. That helps growth. GOD BLESS you poet.
     
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