Poetry Critiques : The Perfect Match

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  1. vrbmars

    vrbmars Member MEMBER

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    I am new so be nice...but be honest.....thank you


    He is the one
    That makes my heart skip a beat with just the mention of his name.
    She is the one
    That makes me want to leave all of the fellas in the middle of a football game.
    He is the one
    That I dreamt about over and over without ever seeing his face.
    She is the one
    That I would willingly give all of my closet space.
    He is the one
    That keeps me smiling even when the skies are gray.
    She is the one
    That makes me weak in the knees each and every day.
    He is the one
    That knows how I am doing and how I am feeling without me saying.
    She is the one
    That I sing love songs about no matter what music is playing.
    He is the one
    That I welcome home every night.
    She is the one
    That sleeps in my arms while I hold her all through the night.
    He is the one
    That makes sense when all else fails.
    She is the one
    That I could find with just her scent as a trail.
    He is the one
    That I call mine all mine.
    She is the one
    That I call my love of a lifetime.
    He is the one
    That I let get away.
    She is the one
    That never knew that I loved her because I didn’t say.
    He is the one
    That is always in my heart.
    She is the one
    That I have always loved right from the start.
    He is the one
    That is with her
    She is the one
    That is with him.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome to destee.com trueful Critique
    welcome to the house of peace & respect
    welcome from above as i bless this some love

    The great mist of he & she mix matching on perfection
    the way it was written and it's structure was well done
    played out nicely and easy for the readers.................

    nice piece again welcome within the family Vrbmars
     
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    thank you

    thank you very much...I really appreciate it...
     
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    most welcome we are very happy to have you within
    the family continue to share and spread the poetic word .
     
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    From one new member to another, it was a very nice poem. The talent is there.
     
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