Black Poetry : the other side (of my bed)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by GA_Sunshyne, Aug 22, 2001.

  1. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...the other side of my bed.
     
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    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the style

    you have written this in is so totally "neat"...
    it puts the words right there and makes you take notice...
    "begging with style"...for some lovin'
    great piece...

    K
     
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    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GA !!!

    exquisite.....harmoniously put together...makes u read it over and over....this is a smoove plea done "deep dish style".:peace:

    g-man
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    SUPER TYGHT

    AS I TAKE FLIGHT
    COMING UPON YA ROOM
    TONIGHT
    FEEL MY RUMBLE HEAR MY ROAR
    I'M BACK FOR MORE..........NIGHT SHIFT:cool: :D
     
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    BlakGurl,

    Why you tryna make the fam think the other side of your bed is empty???? You know I'm right next to you in spirit. (Nah fam, we ain't doing the nasty either...I'm just holding her Sunshyne close). :D

    Seriously GS, this joint was tight like that. You have an uncanny way with emotional dialogue.

    Dig your style - but you knew that already anyway right? ;)

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    KT. thank you for the read... i love the beggin' part! :)

    G-Man. you my dear... are always so good to me!
    thanks for the read & the reply. don't forget about me on
    your next journey!! :)

    $$RICHNE$$. ...as always. it's a pleasure to be
    loved by You!! :) thanks a million tymes My Love.

    Gee-Que. yeahhh!... you're ryght! & i so so appreciate
    the comfort you give/bring/share. :D what would i do without
    you!???? i'ont even wanna know! :)

    Cindy. how did you know that i have a 4-post bed?
    wow!! i loved the description! if i didn't know betta... wait
    a minute!! did Gee-Que tell you 'bout my room??!! :lol:
    thank you for the read!!
     
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    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GA...

    Only you could make the bed covers flow without the slightest crease

    This was beautifully written

    *sheets*

    :heart:
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hunter. your replies always make me feel... as if
    someone heard me!!... & i am humbled. thank You for the
    read. i appreciate cha! :)
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    now that was simply beautiful
    To wait on love can seem like an eternity
    but to run ahead of love and settle for less can be an eternity
     
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    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sweet sunshyne, gurl, i'm really lovin' this piece. very nicely written, if i don't say so myself, ma dear friend. i'm still watchin'...it's tyght! but, uhhh...you already know that. ryght? ryght.
     
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