Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by GA_Sunshyne, Aug 22, 2001.
...the other side of my bed.
you have written this in is so totally "neat"...
it puts the words right there and makes you take notice...
"begging with style"...for some lovin'
exquisite.....harmoniously put together...makes u read it over and over....this is a smoove plea done "deep dish style".
AS I TAKE FLIGHT
COMING UPON YA ROOM
FEEL MY RUMBLE HEAR MY ROAR
I'M BACK FOR MORE..........NIGHT SHIFT
Why you tryna make the fam think the other side of your bed is empty???? You know I'm right next to you in spirit. (Nah fam, we ain't doing the nasty either...I'm just holding her Sunshyne close).
Seriously GS, this joint was tight like that. You have an uncanny way with emotional dialogue.
Dig your style - but you knew that already anyway right?
KT. thank you for the read... i love the beggin' part!
G-Man. you my dear... are always so good to me!
thanks for the read & the reply. don't forget about me on
your next journey!!
$$RICHNE$$. ...as always. it's a pleasure to be
loved by You!! thanks a million tymes My Love.
Gee-Que. yeahhh!... you're ryght! & i so so appreciate
the comfort you give/bring/share. what would i do without
you!???? i'ont even wanna know!
Cindy. how did you know that i have a 4-post bed?
wow!! i loved the description! if i didn't know betta... wait
a minute!! did Gee-Que tell you 'bout my room??!!
thank you for the read!!
Only you could make the bed covers flow without the slightest crease
This was beautifully written
Hunter. your replies always make me feel... as if
someone heard me!!... & i am humbled. thank You for the
read. i appreciate cha!
now that was simply beautiful
To wait on love can seem like an eternity
but to run ahead of love and settle for less can be an eternity
sweet sunshyne, gurl, i'm really lovin' this piece. very nicely written, if i don't say so myself, ma dear friend. i'm still watchin'...it's tyght! but, uhhh...you already know that. ryght? ryght.
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