Black Poetry : The Other Girl

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  1. black_soul

    black_soul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whats going on i know i'm been gone for a good min. but i'm trying to come back hope you enjoy.


    The Other Girl

    Laying on my bed like you been waiting all day
    I’m home now so all you want to do is play

    Saying come sit next to me touch me show me I was missed
    Got so many things I want to do to you had to make a list

    You start by sitting on my lap as I stroking you neck
    We did the same thing last night so you know what to expect

    Hands are moving try to get a new sound out of you every night
    Me and you get along so great we never have to fight

    Making all kinds of noise keeping the neighbors awake
    Never expected tonight to feel this great

    But then my girl is here you still on my lap hard to stop
    Not getting nervous even though my girl is all the way up top

    Doorknob turns we still making noise feel so good can’t help it don’t try to hide
    She walks in saying I can’t believe your doing this again come give me a hug put that guitar to the side


    -BlAcKsOuL
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome back home ........tyte drop
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    black_soul:
    You had me going just for a brief second.:)
    Really diggn' how you penned this scribe.

    Much Luv
     
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    Hey, I loved the twist to this, I thought you were making one turn and you made a "U" turn, so to speak. Tight write.
     
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    you had me going there love on this one! Lucille makes you happy doesnt she. Happy New Year! and hey keep them writes coming love!
     
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    Carameldlite Active Member MEMBER

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    That was really good, I like how you put that twist in there.Keep up the good work
     
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    That was flowing,and you had me going. Great write!:thanks: :terrific:
     
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    black_soul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks alot for the love shown to this
     
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