Black Poetry : The One

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by SwtT, Jul 28, 2003.

  1. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I wrote this about 4 years ago when I was 14 years old. It was about one of my friends.....It's kinda ironic how as Time rolled by....the person it represented turned out to be me.

    You took something from me
    That was more valuable than gold
    You got my pride and dignity
    And then you left me in the cold

    I made a terrible mistake
    of letting"the one" be you,
    Our friendship was at stake
    And before it begun it was through

    I knew you never meant for this to happen
    But it's already done..
    We can't go back to being just friends
    Because now you're marked Number One

    I know things wil never be the same
    But we'll take it day by day
    Yet we are both at blame
    I don't want the love to fade away

    "Us" don't have to matter
    Becuz before we begun we were through
    But I will never forget
    That Number One was you..

    Dec "99"

    ...kinda ironic ain't it?
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yeah, that is definitely ironic. But I hope you and " the one" are still friend don't let this tear your friendship apart. Unfortunately, because I'm a few years younger than you I haven't experienced " the one" yet so I don't really know how you feel deep inside but by the sound of your poetry I can tell you are deeply hurt. Keep your head up my sista don't let this experience bring you down. Things aren't always as bad as they seem. Look at me sounding like a old person. No, but for real though, keep ya head up, alright?

    Much love,
    foxy
     
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    Very Nice SwtT. Was this a first love thing? Break it down for me a little.. if you like. NUMBER ONE!
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Foxy thank you so much for you comment. it makes me feel a lil better. But no, me and my first love(meaning the one who took my virginity) are NOT friends...and we never will be becuz of stupidity.

    Hodde-thank you for your reply :) and yes, it was a first love type of thing. he's number one on my lists and as much as I'd like too, I can't erase him
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow! deep emotional felt flow i feel u sistah
    who has da rites to an virgin !???
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    repost
     
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    i wrote a poem called the one aboput three years ago
    i was 18 back then

    i got into the same predicament and i wanna carl thomas that
    u know

    a beauty