Black Poetry : The Mind Is A Battlefield

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  1. tashatoya

    tashatoya Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The mind is a battlefield always twisting and turning
    Wondering what is right and wrong always yearning
    For a better understanding in the midst of its rhetoric
    Trying to learn more in between interllects because
    Even at times the most smartest need help choosing
    Which road to go, some of the things we go through
    Others will never know because The Mind Is A Battlefield
    Leaving us fussing and fighting within our own minds
    Waiting for someone to save us- just in the knick of time
    Because The Mind Is A Battlefield making us wonder if
    We should Love or Hate progrees on or wait,
    Step into the light or dwell in the darkness
    Confess about our disibilities or plead to smartness
    Steal, lie, or Live right by honesty it becomes confusing
    Because it is left to US if we want to tell the truth
    The Mind Is A Battlefield leaving us praying to Jesus after
    The war is done, hoping and wishing that we have not lost
    But won, the battle within ourself because nobody
    Can take care of us, unless we save ourselves....
    From our own insanity-....
    The Mind Is A Battlefield
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    key points was hit head on here
    this was perfectly done and said flow on
     
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    Joemama0203 Member MEMBER

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    I'm really feeling your poem. You stated many things about the inner struggle we all go through at some point.
     
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    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yea i was really feeling this......truly is a battlefield..and we must constantly war with it each day. On point scribe :idea:
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome Tasha,
    It's very good to have an addition to the family of "unity"...
    seems like you rolled in pulling no punches on this piece, I could't agree more, the mind is a battlefield...but keep in mind...who holds the weapons.
    again, welcome to "home, inside a home"
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well this was on point, sometimes you have to save yourself from yourself. Great job capturing that feeling of uncertainty surrounding self. Flow on.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The mind is always in conflicting motion, has to be trained to know the meaning of quiet......this piece is on hit. Welcome!
     
  8. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yet its a terrible thing to waste..this was on point i can feel the vibe..nice one
    Peace
    Angel
     
  9. naujae

    naujae Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome that was nice piece and hope to hear (read) more from you.
     
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