Khasm13 : the maze of armageddon...

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  1. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    these piercing potent pathways all lead to destruction
    the construction of this maze of causality is the reason for the abduction
    diving deep while doing diligent deductions...compute'n out mad functions
    in search of something...this something is the exit
    trapped in a warzone nexus...this plane is the result of many hexes
    where around every corner another ***** is getting arrested
    hemmed up and shackled...tackled by the lackeys of the maze keeper
    the original night creeper...constables with the temperment and combustibility of ether
    kin to the reaper...in this maze youngins follow the leader
    old fools never truly schooled continue cycles to seeds pooled
    in ponds where tadpoles swim with deviant sharks
    and dogs roam the street with scaring bites to go with their barks
    in the darkness flies poisonous darts that infect everyone looking for a fresh start
    this is a treacherous maze where good souls get ripped apart
    cause the ghetto has no heart...
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Brother Khasm,

    It's creepy ain't it... I love the way you report reality.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Mannnnnnnnnnnnn Khasm u took it down the gut
    this so on point and spell reality check !
    i love when u drop flava it ring out da realism dis what i be
    saying do the thang bruh !
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You so potently described this seemingly endless cycle, do flow on poet.
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi Khas!!!!

    this was sho nuff deep
    you took it there.....
    sho ya right
    love ya style

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Boy o boy, khas you know you bring the real


    you sho' is deep......
     
  7. nabraska

    nabraska Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that's real talk, comparing armageddon to the hood is off the chain, and your alliteration left a trail of metal behind
     
  8. Khasm13

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    good lookin fam...

    one love
    khasm
     
  9. spicybrown

    spicybrown Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey Khasm, this piece kinda reminds me of "Thriller", haunting, yet gripping piece. :). I'm loving the suspense.
     
  10. Legendof_1_Spirit

    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    <appears>

    Very potent, thought provoking, and well written! Love the rhyme scheme and how it flowed smooth like the wind.

    Excellent Work!

    <disappears>
     
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