Black Poetry : The Love Train

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by alyce, Jul 18, 2001.

  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she called me from the train
    nervous, excited
    already onboard

    and while she was speaking
    my mind traveled back in time
    when I knew this feeling

    but this poem is not about me

    my girl is taking the love
    train to a destination not
    completely unknown
    but, to a place, and arms that
    beckon her home

    this awesome place she's
    been in dreams many times before,
    shall awaken her soul, when she
    steps through the open door

    and while she was laughing
    my mind re-visited my own epiphany
    when I received my healing

    but this poem is not about me

    my sista is on the train
    moving across a rolling landscape of
    beautiful country to another beauty
    beyond anything her eyes have ever seen

    in mid-sentence, the line went dead
    but I could clearly see
    a young Black Queen in the window seat
    riding toward her appointment with destiny

    no, this piece is not about me, but

    I’ll be blessed by the things
    she’ll come to know

    when he anoints her poetry

    a
     
  2. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Tyte...

    This is nice...very nice...
     
  3. Hunter

    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My Gurl!!

    Only your wise ink would come to know
    How much the God of all things liquid
    Could anoint my flow
    And leave me fully drenched
    With my thirst satisfied

    But this is not a poem
    And it is not just about me...

    It is about
    "The Old Man And The Sea"
    But what does Hemmingway
    Have to say to me?

    I have been to the bottom
    Of the ocean
    And now I swim
    In all I came to see

    But this is not a poem...

    *two-fish*

    Beautiful flow my sista!!!






    :love:
     
  4. Tyrone

    Tyrone Active Member MEMBER

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    this is seriously

    tight, sis! There is a poignancy about it. And while it was most def in honor of your girl...it's still about you. And we all win.

    tight sis!

    Ant
     
  5. wildflower7

    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    herculeeez herculeeez herculeeez!!!

    sometimes i get so excited and happy
    when i read you (and hunter)
    because you are so wise in verse (and real life)
    and i admire all you have to offer and
    all that you share...
    you'll never know what an impact your
    presence and sharing here has made on
    my house.
    -7:spinstar:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    SUPER SMOOTH FLOW

    JUST BEAUTIFUL GLAD I WAS ON DA TRAIN FO DA RIDE
    THANKZ A)):kiss: :heart:

    MO/LUV SIS.Queen
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    alyce

    now you're positively absolutely sure it's not about you

    ha ah

    feeling the love and the train baby

    loving your art as usual


    <DSS>
     
  8. T

    T Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    uhn uhn uhn....

    write the story, sistah A!

    ****!!!

    T
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sustah A

    Gurl you done - done it again! I'm in "heaven" when I read this piece~! It's exceptional ... then again, your flows always are!

    One.
     
  10. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In all honesty I am a little hazy about this poem but I am sure that it is due to my limited knowledge, and it is moments like this that make me regret the things that I have not read. This poem flowed beautifully even with my limited understandings of all the imagery.
    Thanks for the scribe.
     
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