Black Poetry : " The long term effects of We'd "

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  1. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Be in love for this one

    whether you already are ...
    have been, or wish you were ( like me ) --- just BE in love, for this one.
    _________________________________________________________


    " The long term effects of we'd "

    Let me be your Friday Night.
    We'll both do nothing and call it love.
    We'd sit on the phone, hardly speaking -----
    just pleased to have each other's attention.
    Let me be your Friday Night.

    On a cobblestone road in Paris,
    We'd discover a fountain that awaits our wishes.
    We'd sit under the Cherry Moon &
    contemplate the prince OF revolution.
    We'd discuss the finer things in life
    vs.
    the minor things in life
    .. and have our pick.
    Let me be your Friday Night.
    We'd drive to the middle of Nowhere,
    just to be somewhere .... 2gether.
    We'd reminisce in Native Tongues - bonita applebum

    Let me be your time well spent.
    We'd share the bathroom each morning
    admiring the symmetry of our complexions in the mirror.
    We'd slip into sunday mornings w/ no plans of escaping.



    Hey.



    An irresistable bite of the sweetest fruit you must be.
    Could touch me from across the room.

    The symphony of your voice.

    The acoustics of our union...

    exercised in the midst of Classical & Opera,
    conciertos & aria's.

    Who's bathtub is this anyway ?

    Let me be your E turn uh Tee.

    We'd hold hands in torrential downpours
    and forget that we're wet.

    We'd avoid the parties,clubs and drinking -
    instead of TRYING to have a " good time "
    We'd just enjoy each other.


    On each other's lips more than words.


    On each other's minds more than thoughts.


    On the Caspian .


    On the Mediterrainian.
    Who's yacht is this anyway ?

    Let me be your Friday Night.

    Let me be your Friday Night.

    __________________________________________________________


    1st - this was written about 2 yrs. ago,
    I had just watched Under the Cherry Moon
    so it has that feel to it.

    ( the line " we'll both do nothing and call it love " is prince )

    2nd - i was losing the love of my life to the party scene.
    All i wanted was her. All she wanted was the dancefloor.
    But it's still a Love poem.

    3rd - I am going to set aside a day to just
    absorb your poetry - I promise to take a break soon !!!

    and coming after the break ... " i love thighs "

    thank you ________________________________________________
     
  2. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh YES!!

    This one does it for me Hyp~!!

    Oh my ~ I am fittin' to pass out ~:D

    :love:

    You my dear are filling my
    day's dreams and I
    want to tell you that the
    prolonged use of we'd has
    me 'us-lifted' to metaphorical
    castles well beyond the sky

    Yes... you can be my Friday night,
    but is that really all you want to be...

    How 'bout being my everything?
    ... how 'bout being all seven days of the
    week?

    In espan`ol, you could be my --
    El fin de semana ~

    How 'bout being my December?
    ...heating up so much love
    us-melting the snow or
    make angels to pray for you
    and I -- keeping us grounded
    together for your E turn uh Tee
    and my In fin a tay

    What month is it anyway?

    What day is it?

    How bout I could be your
    birthday? Gifting you with
    love from sun UP to SUN down
    us-unwrapping
    the bows of lust
    helping you to get to the center
    of my
    'cherry'
    MOON ~ pie
    you eating off the
    sweet of me while
    I'm licking off
    the residUe
    celebrating until we cum confection

    A Pin-yata
    that pops
    as you hit
    the 'G' spot
    and I release
    all of the
    sugary-filled
    peaches and cream from
    inside of me

    Who made this pie anyway?

    Who else's pin-yata 'pops' like this?

    Did you cum yet?




    Oh.



    Can I Hypnotize the SoulurN2...?!



    Hey.



    Could you, would you?

    Be more than my valentine...

    Be more than 60 seconds in
    a minute...

    Be more than 24 hours in a day...
    ...A clock with no hands that
    still tells time...

    Be more than four weeks
    in a month... everyday being
    our 'pay day'...

    Be more than 3 months in a quarter...

    Be more than 12 months in a year...
    ...celebrating New Years - every EVE...

    Let "us" be the 'love-turn' of the
    century~

    Will you do that -- just for me?
     
  3. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hyp, now, you know i'm diggin' this piece, dear poet. and the response that followed is too, hot :hot: :hot: ! i'm truly lovin' it!

    ~~letluvpoetryflo~~
     
  4. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HYP~

    Just had to read YOU again.....!!

    This is AweSome lil' bro, I love it- I love it!:cool:
     
  5. alyce

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    yes, Hypno

    this is beauty, and beauty again...

    My cheeks are damp from this read....and that's a good thing!

    Thank you for this awesome piece, Hypno!

    a

    (we need an icon for tears of joy! HELLO?)
     
  6. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HYP,

    brother man!!! this was tight! god scribes run in the fam :D.

    this is mos def a "10"

    one love,blak
     
  7. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    first things first

    Before reading anyone else's reply - I must reply individually to N2URSOUL - for her " reply "


    the english language is too feeble to express
    how..... - how ................
    how very pleased I am w/ your response to this piece.

    If I took you THERE - rest assured , you now have company - ;o) !!!!!



    that was brilliant ( brilliant is too weak a word )
    that was marvelous ( marvelous is too weak a word )

    it was .....




    Thank you -

    You and I definately connect girl , -
    this cyber thang has delivered some wonderful peeps into my cipher .
     
  8. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Blak - alyce and lister

    damp cheeks ??? -

    WOW !

    i'm truly honored
    and Lister - you are sooo right ,
    that aftershock was a mutha - ( n2oursoul's is tooo much ! )

    Blak - man, I wonder what
    it would be like if we could assemble all

    this talent -

    Us folks in the Renna ( me and Nadea who posts here and others )
    we put out a book a year ago.

    maybe Destee Poetry could do the same.

    Something to commemorate
    the beauty of words uniting souls who otherwise
    would be " hi " and " bye " at the most.
     
  9. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    And you know that I...

    should be thanking you for evoking my thoughts with your original piece... so much that it made me cum wit my own response to vibe with your flow.....

    Glad to know that I am not alone ~ ~ Thanks Boo!!


    1 :heart:
     
  10. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This piece so aptly decribes that joyous state of just being in love. Don't have to decorate it, the love is beautiful, as is, just a man and a woman, together, loving each other. Wow...
     
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