Black Poetry : The lesson she taught

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  1. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sleepless nights because of you
    Days without eating I’ve went through
    What did you have to prove?
    Came into my life, then made a move
    Leaving me empty handed, the lonely thought of being stranded
    Well past the point of being unable to stand it!
    Adjust is what I had to do
    Adapt to a life with you
    Hardships and heartaches trying to pull through
    Don’t worry! Get over her! I’ll find better!
    Block out the thought, as if you never met her!
    Impossible! I say, the taste is to strong
    Bitter but sweet my body still longs
    Suck it up! Be a man! Take the loss!
    This is nothing more than a curve ball life likes to toss
    It’ll make me stronger, build my character!
    Next woman I meet I’ll be sure to take care of her!
    No more late nights, hanging with the boys
    I’ll start to do things she might enjoy!
    Fellas take heed, an if not you need to worry
    If you aren’t all ready, you’ll be telling this story!
    Please be advised your heart may be the fee
    Your woman just might run to a guy like me!
    Someone who’s been through it! Someone who knows!
    A woman shouldn’t be toyed with, but placed on a throne!
     
  2. PurpleMoons

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    Awe! that was beautiful!
    No doubt a lesson well
    learned.
    Loved it!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very gentle and sweet
    i like dis THEONE ya pen laid it out correct
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    right on, I was going through a thang,
     
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    yeah i felt the emotions crossing path
    but what seem a hold is only a moment
    of stilliness til u fine self on the brinks
    then u come back stronger
     
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    Virgil Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Life is about adjusting and you've capture that life lesson in this one. Nice write.
     
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    unfoolish1223 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked this it was deep and Im glad u realized that women should be respected but it has to be a 2 way thing...nice flow
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like it...

    I like it...

    Very emotive and wise scribe...

    ^5 I'm feeling it...
     
  9. NicoleM

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    nice one...
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Deep lesson learned, and so much easier not to repeat the same the next time around. You seem to bring them from the heart.
     
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