Black Poetry : The Inviting Smile

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  1. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Each time she notices him she smiles
    The spirited smile causes much confusion
    He wants to understand the inviting smile
    But, he continues to conceive no solution

    Is it his smile? Is he a cause of delight?
    He struggles to make no preclusion
    Because, something says it cannot be
    It cautions him it’s just an illusion

    Why is she playing in his thoughts?
    What are her grounds for this intrusion?
    And, at what point should he inquire
    So he can attempt to attain a resolution?

    For, the ring she sports on her left hand
    Makes it tricky to derive any conclusion
    But, if her smile is to induce his interest
    He seems prepared for any collusion

    The way she’s conveying this grin,
    It is creating a profound impression
    Now he embraces the enjoyable notion,
    that they’re making some type of connection

    He appreciate the sexy slant of her eyes
    The soft brown in her complexion
    As he contemplates the best course of action,
    to secure her endearing affection?

    How will he inquire the goal of her glare?
    Will inquires produce any progression?
    Will she somehow clarify any conditions?
    Because he’d prefer there be no deception

    Thus he moves in with prudence
    He applies the utmost discretion…
    recognizing something brilliant can blossom,
    seeing it in the eyes of her expressions
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    now this was nice
    a smooth read
    flow on...
    nice to read ya agian
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    really like how u expressed dis one
    tyte smooth scribe poet
     
  4. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wel thanks for reading, I'm glad everyone is feeling my flow... the story is still in progress, but I'm sure thru my writing a conclusion will come.
     
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    Akilah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ahhhh... this one made me giggle... remembering the times that I was the grinner :thanks:

    Great imagery ....



    Much Peace :spinstar:
     
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    NICE SEDUCTIVE PLOT!

    How inducing the smile...so much it can convey , while using the lips and the teeth
    but not a word does she really say! Oops! He's coming this way...Did my smile get
    me into trouble today? Or is something extraordinary coming my way! I sigh and pray
    it's time I put this old wedding band away!

    Blessings On Your House! :love:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hard to read those expressions sometimes, especially those smiles, very nice rhyme scheme.
     
  8. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like your expresson ms luciousb thanks for droping that... thanks for reading, it feels good when folks are feeling my stuff
     
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    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was so smooth
    i like
     
  10. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Sweet baby face, I'm glad you like
     
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