Black Poetry : The invisible enemy(Fear Killer II...Fear speaks)

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  1. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When you speak
    I'm the thought that makes you restrain
    Tainting your speech with folly to fit in

    When you look in the mirror
    I'm the reflection contributing to your loss of esteem
    Announcing your shortcomings
    Ignoring your true beauty

    When you want to be reassured
    I'm the voice telling you no one cares
    (How does it feel
    In the cage of isolation and apathy?) :grin:

    When someone hurts you
    I'm that thought of revenge
    Instead of reconciliation

    When you're lonely
    I teach you to indulge
    To numb the pain
    (Look at you now..
    full of emptiness...I love it!) :grin:

    When you're complimented
    I tap your shoulder
    Making you too
    Skeptical
    To receive it(*what do they really want from you?")

    When you're angry
    I tell you to point fingers
    So that the problem remains
    (If you see the real problem, you see me
    We can't have that can we?) :grin:

    I torture you
    Burying you inside yourself
    I control you
    Making your life a living death
    I blind you
    You'll never see things clearly
    I'm behind you
    So close you always feel me
    I taint you
    With every word I speak
    I torment you
    Adding insult to defeat
    I govern you
    And the way you deal with others
    I isolate you
    In solitude you suffer
    I arrest you
    Nurturing your insecurities
    I hate you
    But must use you
    To bring others to me!
    I am fear
    I have this world on bowed kness
    Invisible and crafty
    I'm the enemy you cannot see! :grin:
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very deep scribe
    the dark side
    feeling this
    flow on
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You really worked your pen on this one, yes, fear can do you in and draw others in with you, this was a tight write.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this here was mastered tytely and deeply
    i was all in ti like wow !!!!!
    ya pen has mad ink and style flow on
     
  5. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks fam 4 the love
    There is a final part to this
    Fear must die...at least in my poetic mind!
    Again thanks for the love

    Bluewater- Fear itself is dark...many just don't see it...needs to be exposed
    thank you for your unending appreciation of my work

    Watzinaname- Thank you. The pen is still working sister!

    Rich- To have a poet with as much talent as you all into the work....wow it humbles me.....thanks bruh

    Peace and love
     
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    this was tight
    deep flow
    likes this
    indeed
    flow on...
    watchin ya
    Peace
    Angel
     
  7. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mzblakangel= thanks for the feel
    Watchinu2 :wink:
     
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    Peace twision,

    this is a very solid write and clear
    and truthful message Poet.

    reminds me of the sermon i heard
    today from a Unitarian Universalist
    minister.

    your poem is the poem version of
    her speech in some aspects.

    fear can keep anyone from excelling
    or being who they truly are. i'm sure
    that you've helped someone with these
    profound words.

    great job! :)

    peace,
    Universoul The Essential One
    of the Sun

    One Universal Love always!

     
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