Black Poetry : The Intensity Of My Tears...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    on this poem some of ya'll may think that the person is leavin' me, like breakin' up with me...but actually this is about my fiancee who lives in another state...and when he comes to visit me and leaves it a very sad time and i wanted to write about it...
    so its about when we cry together...but he always comes back :)

    so here it is! hope ya like it!


    Deeply, my eyes bore into yours
    Consistently the tears began to come forth
    Filling my once waterless eyes
    Holding on for dear life hoping they would not slide
    Biting my lips, my tongue, my jaw
    Gripping my hands so hard, that they become raw
    Curling my toes to squeeze out the pain
    Clasping you firmly just to keep me sane
    But the tears came anyway
    Crawling their way sluggishly down my face
    And I begged God for another day
    But all the anguish remained the same
    I strived so hard to maintain the silent cry
    As the hot tears gushed rapidly down my nose and my cheeks
    Finally reaching my lips so that I taste bitter tears that I cried
    By heart beat escalated to an extraordinary high
    I felt like if God said it was so, I could readily die
    And suddenly I felt such a gentle-hearted touch
    Coming from the love of my man
    In its warmth I felt the love so much
    That I surrendered to its command
    Intently my eyes bore deep into your eyes
    As I abruptly notice an emotion about your usual eyes of allure
    I observe that your actions are the dual things in affect
    And through our saturated eyes and clammy hands we connect
    Your lips form the word “baby” and me you begin to caress
    I know you’ll be back and its f*uckin’ crazy
    That I’m missin’ you so **** much and you haven’t even left…
     
  2. serenti-poet

    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like this I kno this feelin oh so well thanks for givin it to us straight congratulations YOU GETTIN MARRIED!! LoL :);):);)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i feel ya sista this took me back when i was on the same wave
     
  4. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks serenti :)
    and yep i'm gettin' married as u can see :):):):)

    glad u can relate to it rich...:)
     
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    i likes dis :) it's like ****...you love him about ::::::::::spreads arms wide:::::::: <~that much?
     
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    thanks swtT....... and yeah i love him about that much :)lol

    ~lovely~
     
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    this is so sweet. You miss your baby everytime he leaves. Even though you know he'll be back. I really enjoyed this read.
     
  8. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks purplemoons......:):)
     
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    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    congrats on your engagement :toast:
    and
    the poetry is definitely felt.

    nfinite....
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks alot j'hiah :)
     
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