Black Poetry : The Innocence Of Revolution

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  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A mother and her child walk
    he states in excitement "Mom,
    look at the beautiful candles"
    the mother hurriedly walks faster
    towards the "candles" so her child
    can feel the heat of oppression
    unleashed...after a while her
    child replied "Mom, do you
    smell that sweet scent in the air?"
    and "Mom, do you hear all the sirens?"
    and "people screaming...what's that
    word "Justice?" the mother eyes begin
    too well up swell up the banks of her
    emotions are on the edge of being
    overcome by the happenings of her
    surroundings...the child just smiles,
    they walk.....
    ..................
    .....................
    .........................her eyes have
    become beacons of the struggle yet coated
    by "painfalls" her inner self is
    on it's knees praying to the Lord that after
    this day a change gon' come....at least for her
    child.....they get to the edge of optimism and
    before them is a burning building surrounded
    by the offsprings of oppression screaming,
    "justice, justice, we are tired of JUST US"
    the child gets caught in the rhythm that
    accompanys revolution and bobs his head
    without him knowing he has an inherent
    connection with the proclamations of
    "justice" for he is the next in line...
    warrior for the struggle...in his innocence
    the child picks up a bottle with the word "Molotav"
    on the front and throws it towards an unlit
    brownstoned "candle" and claps his hands in excitement
    as the "candle" begins too burn.....the
    mother knowing that revolution is necessary
    kisses her son and walks away leaving him
    in a state of adornment to experience what
    revolution is...

    (c)2001 blakverb
     
  2. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well is there such a thing as...

    Diggily ****? - Blak, this is ta ta ta tyght!!

    Well thought out prose...lovin' it!
     
  3. Desert Storm

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    Wow,you have brought the essence of motherhood

    Wow blackverb let me just say that I be feelin you and then some. All da time. Feelin this vibe,all da tyme. Thank you
    Desert Storm
     
  4. Hunter

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    blakverb.....

    This was so beautiful that when I first stumbled upon it
    and I read the first few lines in my mind...I had to stop

    Then start again..to read it out loud this time
    To feel the texture of your revolutionary verse on my tongue
    To hear the sounds of your well placed words on the line
    To listen to the innocence of a child captured within the flames....

    And afterwards....to watch the mother pass the torch...for her child to feel the pain...of revolution once removed...again

    ....Come sit with me and we will speak poetry.........

    This was such a magnificent piece bv...really...an extraordinary scribe :)

    *candle-light*
     
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    as a mother

    of a black man child...

    this piece contorts the heart of me through and through, especially:

    "the
    mother knowing that revolution is necessary
    kisses her son and walks away leaving him
    in a state of adornment to experience what
    revolution is..."

    have mercy ~ have mercy.

    Thank you bv

    3rd eye receiving much light this morning.

    A
     
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    Say it...say it all!
    This is an awesome piece. Thank you.

    BE
     
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    verb,

    you spoke it and the came...

    the crowd of witnesses is growing...
     
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    I will have to read this image again and again
    walk away and chew Then return to the puzzle to peice together the images you draw
    Way Deeeep
    Thanks
     
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    blak

    Your work is 'revel'utionary!! Tight piece! Although I have no children I could feel the emotion here.
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    N2, Desert, Hunter, Alyce, Heartbeat, dnommo, shaz, Afri,

    Thank you all for the comps...Thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu and that's real (i've heard that somewhere before?)

    one love,blak
     
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