Khasm13 : The Incubus of Impression...Interlude II

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  1. Khasm13

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    as my torturous dreams proceed
    my mental changes speed
    to recall a day in time
    in which my dreams showed the lead
    and planted the seed
    that now grows with intensity
    inside of me
    my ancestral roots are tied to the earth
    like a tree....
    this dream must have something to do with a malignant
    significant force in this third dimensional sea
    my fathers teachings must be the key
    but unknown to me
    in boston there be
    one call razeke(ra-zee-key)
    ploting to let asteral evils free
    just like the dark ones tried before he
    once again good and evil battle in the
    hollow world(earth) as a destiny unfurls
    this cancerous burl
    must prove to be removed
    or else it curtains for us
    humans hunted for food
    the human age over
    overtaken by an evil spirit brood...
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You really need to think about changing the short story into a long story...complete with the poems of course. Then you need to think about getting your work out there in book form so it can bring in the green, you know what I means ? I mean, there's a big world out there with well over a billion people in it. Suppose out of that billion about 50,000 0r 100,000 like your work ? Why you'd be rich...and all off of less than 1% of the people. !

    Shine On !
     
  3. Khasm13

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    thank you very much for the compliment queen...i am still trying to mature writting...but that is my goal...with people like yourself having faith in me, i know that i will eventually get there...thank you so much queentswana :)
    one love
    khasm
     
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    We see...what you see not...on the real
     
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    man dis her jump in my head like musical strings
    i agree wit da sistah above ya skillz far and beyond bruh !
    tyte scribing here
     
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    :bowdown:.....you really should consider what qeenie was suggesting
     
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    Hey Khasm..."BIG 'BOUT YA"...Nuff Respect Due

    Once Again.....My Bruh..My Friend...
    You have delivered
    a lyrical lesson
    without quiver....Stand Tall Bruh-Man....Stand Tall

    If the enemy could read....Whoooooo!

    Peace, Power, and Prosperity...To you Brotha Khasm
     
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    You play with words until they sing. And yes, there are something about dreams that can just call to you. Intricately written.
     
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    Wow, Khasm

    You pick words that link together as if joined from birth. Do your thing. I love your works.
     
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    This riveting kinetic flow captures the mind.
     
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