Black Poetry : the illusion

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by gempis, Jan 22, 2005.

  1. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you know that childhood magician thinking
    where adults are so much larger than you
    where you must know it all by the time you're 30
    and be good at life, too
    as a kid I read stories and imagined things
    sprung tales that seemed too improbable to write about
    that's ridiculous, I'd say to myself
    don't bother to put that on paper
    it couldn't happen like that
    people aren't even capable
    turns out I gave the human race too much credit
    or maybe, once again, I put all my "shoulds" on to it
    because people live out such dramas every day
    I couldn't even make up most of what I've lived and heard
    but that's not even the half of it
    people are wrecks, fragile, fallible
    one comment from another
    can send an addict back into a behavior
    destroy someone's self-esteem
    keep a body from being who she is
    render another mute and depressed
    one action by someone else
    can stay with you for the rest of your life
    bring fears or Post Traumatic Stress Syndrome
    change the way you think about things
    or set up a mental limitation
    we get tangled up in our egos
    they stagnate us and stunt our growth
    afraid to be truthful with someone because
    we're scared of what they will or won't say
    communication is hard and we front,
    pretending we don't get swallowed by our emotions
    we're invested
    in seeing each other as separate
    strangers, foreign to us
    instead of all connected
    whether it's because of race, religion
    sexual orientation, class or whatever
    the failure to see we're all family
    keeps us from coming together
    when I was little I was too sensitive
    felt other people's feelings so
    I thought I was very weak while
    others seemed so strong
    maybe that's why I'm still always surprised to see
    all the pain caused by fragility that continually surrounds me
    the human condition, in body and mind
    is so delicate it's a wonder we survive
    blood vessels, nerves, muscles, slapped together and
    held by a few layers of skin
    kinda like the inventions we use
    to navigate the world with
    the miracle of life isn't the creation -
    it's the illusion we're strong when we're weak
    that we believe in
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...my sister, my sister. So much truth in this piece, I'll just comment on a few aspects of it.
    I agree that a comment from another takes one back to a certain place. I feel it's either because there have been many comments of that type, that we can't bear the weight of it all any more. Or the comment takes us back to a place that is simply excruciating.
    And yes we do pretend that we're strong when we're weak. It can be the only way we can get from one minute to the next, at times life can be that painful. But as you say, it can also veil our eyes to another's similiar human condition.
    I'll stop here, I don't want to write a book all up in your thread, lol. But, the message in this and the detailed way you composed it, made this write to be very thought provoking. Excellent scribe sis, take a bow!! :terrific:
     
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    Watz you ask her to drop you a poem.
    This is what she had in mind. Wow!

    Gempis
    This is a powerful flow. Its a multiple reader.. one should want and should read this again and again. Each line has so much power, detail and truth.

    " afraid to be truthful with someone because
    we're scared of what they will or won't say
    communication is hard and we front,"

    This is what I'm talking about! Illusions
     
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    that last stanza had an interesting commentary on life in general...
    that may be tru...cause i'm da type to wear my emotions on my face
    so when i look weak...i am...and when i look strong....i am
    thank the Lord i'm not weak too often....dope piece sis
    one love
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whewwwwwwww sista u really told a story within and laid out reality
    what a awesome flow here big ups on dis .
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Watz, you can write a book all up in hurr anytime, sis. You know I appreciate your mind and your poetry, and I had a feeling you'd see my points. Shoot, maybe it's time you and I did a collab, ya know? Thanks for what you said, and thanks for your love and support. It means worlds.

    HODEE, your reply means so much to me because it's so thoughtful, just like you always are. Thanks for taking the time to read, for feelin me and for letting me know. I really appreciate the love, and send it right back to ya.

    Khasm, I'm always honored when you stop by one of my pieces and drop me some words. Thanks for the love and understanding, bro. You da bomb and den some.

    $$RICH$$, I loves ya. Thanks for your warm words of praise. It always feels great coming from you.
     
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    You're welcome gempis. And hey, if you want to do a collab sometime, great. Send me something, don't know how good my mind is lately on topics...lol.
     
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    you couldn't be closer to the truth
    if you were standing in the middle of it
    ...which you are
    "we are, our strongest...when we are, our weakest"
    because it gives us "clarity" which we often lack,
    when we percieve ourselves to be strong...

    as I always say...Gold without fire is never pure gold...

    and to echo the poet tupac..."it was his sensitivity that made him hard"

    your ability to fight and face injustice comes from your ability to feel so deeply...

    love the layers of messages you pulled together in this poem...

    it flowed from you...like a well needed release

    and we are all the more inspired and wiser...because of it.

    Love you sister!
    Sage​
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    gempis..you have always been multilayered..complex in your
    simplicity...profound in your flows...which is why i stop when i see your
    name and read your flows..
    and....it continues so...in this piece....it continues
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sage, leave it to you to compliment me while at the same time dropping some profound wisdom of your own. I love "gold without fire is never pure gold." Ima hafta use that. Thank you so much for your words, but most of all for your understanding. You make a girl feel great. Bless you, sis - love you.

    deepy, you know I feel so much respect for you and your work. I'm honored by what you've said. Thank you, thank you, thank you for your words. Much love, sis.
     
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