Black Poetry : The Great Pretender

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  1. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I closed my eyes and pretended
    that you were my first love.
    Pretended that you're every stroke,
    Every move of your body,
    Every contour of your lips,
    Every flick of your tounge....
    was his.
    I pretended that for at least 3 hours
    that I was in love.
    I pretended that no matter what,
    you and I would stay un-changed
    on this stolen day, when I laid in
    your arms and you kissed my lips
    and my forhead
    ^the sweetest thing I have ever known

    I knew the cold, hard facts of
    the day, yet I pretended I
    didn't mind.
    I pretended to be a cold hearted
    ***** to you in the weeks after I
    made love to you.
    I pretended to claim back my heart...
    When I still couldn't find it.
     
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    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is so deep and honest...i loved it.
     
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    this is deep...
    nice flow
    like it alot
     
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    painful and full of emotion my sista :)
     
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    Home is where the heart is, but my heart isn't her
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    Wow... tyte flow...
     
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    WHOA!!!!

    Girl this was so on point.........you're searchin through the
    skeletons of souls on this one.......

    The Great Pretender........how profound!

    I must say this is definitely one of your best, creative approach
    with a unbelievably realistic message....wow........I'm speechless
     
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    this was ill lil sis...
    give me sum more of dis...
    tyte @ss scribe
    peace
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ya great vision has done it again
    a very sweet lovin pretend that felt so real
    flow on SwtT................dig this piece
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you everybody:):):):):):):):):)
    Angelic:eek: I made you speechless??? wow!!1 I gotta start writing like this ALL the time!:lol:
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Cindy!!!!:) He is better for me....it's just hard to let him into my life when I have gone through so much grief before him....
     
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