Black Poetry : The Girls I See

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by livin_legend, May 9, 2003.

  1. livin_legend

    livin_legend Member MEMBER

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    I see you everyday
    it pains me to see you that way
    the pain in your face
    looks like you're being sprayed with mace
    I walk by
    wanting to say more than hi

    Walking by with your smile
    i want to stop you and chat awhile
    i get so nervous
    just wanting to be at your service
    at the end of the day
    i want you to come my way

    Seeing you in every way
    makes me feel I can't get away
    yeah we are cool
    it feels as though we are in a 2 person pool
    can in get some space
    or do i have to say it in your face?

    ya'll can continue this poem if you want to
     
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    Royal_T Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Personally speaking I actually love this the way it is, but if you're inviting people to add more power to you. I love it though. I won't touch it.
     
  3. serenti-poet

    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    livin I'm comin up with a respond right now kay? I like this alot so you know I have to respond flow with you in a bit. :) peace and blessins keep flowin.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte flow well scribe poet !
     
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