Black Poetry : The Giggle

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  1. Harry Hyman

    Harry Hyman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The Giggle

    In the misty, murky mire of a mangled, marshy mud
    rose a Moon betwixt the shadows 'neath a starry night above
    No bird beat wings, no mouse did squeak, not even an owl's hoot
    did pierce the stillness clinging to the trees and plants and roots.

    I stomped upon the cigarette, the embers fumed and fizzled
    as I turned to go back inside, I swore I heard a giggle
    Not large but small, not big but tiny, not huge but very wee
    Behind the house down by the marsh's solitary tree

    I stepped on leaves. I sloshed thru grass. I parted a bush with fear
    And beheld a sight not often seen but classified as rare
    A tiny stadium filled with bugs, some odd, some known by name
    were giggling, cheering in tiny voices at an insect Baseball game !

    Miniature floodlights lit the diamond, a roach hit a highball fly
    A beetle with cap and glove caught it, the audience roared and sighed
    I couldn't believe it ! My mind was blown ! Legs and feet went limp
    as mosquito vendors shouted "Get your hot dogs, burgers and shrimp"

    Mesmerized, my face went slack, the muscles cramped my jaw
    Only a spectacle like this comes once to remember forevermore
    I moved and something snapped and cracked, a shrub, some twigs, a branch
    All bugs did turn their eyes on me, their glare....an avalanche!

    They scattered in an instant even turned off all the lights
    and plunged the field in darkness making shadows of the night
    The beating wings, the mouse's squeak, the owl's nightly hoot
    pierced the calm to chase the bugs with abandoned hot pursuit
    And the tiny voices faded 'neath a starry night above
    In the misty, murky mire of a mangled marshy mud.
    HH
     
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    Your style is so refreshingly original...
    this played to all the senses...
    I could envision the entire story...
    This was just tooooo cute...
    and your writing is absolutely awesome...

    Entertaining Piece!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very much enjoyed dis flow here ya pen is tyte
     
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    Really great writing and story telling, the imagery in this scribe is fantastic, enjoyed the read very much so, very refreshing!!
     
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    This was madd deep.....I love this piece......madd props
     
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    Such a very talented storyteller.

    Enjoyed every piece of it, letting out giggles.

    Really nice.
     
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    from the title to the last line, this was some fun
     
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    This piece opens up a world, a mystical setting. Will more happen here? I'd love to know...keep writing.
     
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    Thank you everyone, I'm overwhelmed with your appreciation and love! HH
     
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    Your wrighting is enchanting , Have you ever thought of wrighting childrend books?
     
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