Black Poetry : The first time you were here

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by moham, Jul 22, 2005.

  1. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You were in my bedroom
    I can still smell you
    black and true
    tired,
    but still in the mood

    We talked and we teased
    we danced and pleased

    ...eachother

    We were alone
    here
    you and me
    anticipating this moment
    anxiously

    This was the first time
    we were

    one and another.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the beauty displayed here was divine
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It was wonderful, short and to the point...
    I rolled with your flow poet, well done
     
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    You captured that feeling, that essence of a first time. Well done poet.
     
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