Black Poetry : The Final Curtain

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  1. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You blamed me for the reason that we could not be
    But the truth was
    That you never really loved me
    Did you even care
    I promised myself
    That I wouldn’t be hurt by you again
    But here I stand again
    Just like before
    Hurting more than I could have ever imagined
    We couldn’t be together, not because of my reservations
    Or because our timing was off
    It was because you weren’t strong enough to stand on your own two feet
    You always thought you needed someone to hold you up
    Instead of just stand beside you
    You needed her to lean on, not me
    So I guess it’s true
    People don’t change
    Just look at you
    You said things would be different one day
    Some day soon
    That you would win me back
    That one-day we would be together
    Over and over I tried to believe you
    And again and again I was let down
    But now you’re forever tied to her
    And I’m supposed to smile and be happy for you
    You weren’t there when I needed you the most
    So we’re left with nothing
    Emotionally broken beyond repair
    There’s nowhere to go from here
    Except our separate ways
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah ..you let loose in this flow
    how you felt at the time
    hearing you words indeed
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Those words hit us like a sledge hammer, you don't want to hurt any more, your heart has been broken in too many places. Very emotively written piece.
     
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    I felt this with you...but...separate ways is the only way...to bring you back to YOU. The :heart: is a 'self-healer...but lingering into darkness ...isn't. Take this time to just relax and heal self.
    this is an emotional poem...but wonderful.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    nice drop felt all of this release
     
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    oh my Renee...
    this jerked my emotions
    as if it were my own story
    ...the memories are always
    there and they never hurt
    any less...but with experience
    comes growth...and if
    it was unhealthy...then
    at least your now free
    to receive the love that
    you dream of ...the love
    you deserve...the love
    that will...make your :heart: whole again
    Peace...Sister...this moved me... :grouphug:
     
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    MS RENEE I love this piece, very sincere,
     
  8. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all SOOOOO much, I really appreciate the feed back. I have been so busy I and I haven't witten anything in a while so I'm trying to get back. Thanks 4 the :heart:.
     
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    Yep, I like this one. It's always pleasing to see the solution flow out of the pen. Thanks for sharing Renee.
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    renee,
    NICE POEM,
    It's an blessing to know when the final act is over and how to bow and exit gracefully keeping self together......

    Peace and Blessings......
     
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