Black Poetry : The feel of...sometimes

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by jahvandus, Apr 9, 2001.

  1. jahvandus

    jahvandus Active Member MEMBER

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    ashes deep drop
    incense thoughts
    eclipse the aromas
    i name them after...
    astounding
    delicateness
    resting place mahogany heaven
    sincere miles search I...
    found a restless kiss
    dressed in my illusions
    nakedly placed on sound in...
    ebony soaked walls

    I'm with touch
    taming impurities
    blind folded
    against my epitome
    vision cuddling
    inside hollow masquerades
    to surface love...sometimes

    jahvandus
     
  2. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yo i read this 2wice to comprehend it and when i did,
    i ranked it 2 tyyte...

    peace
     
  3. Hunter

    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    J

    So delicate
    And beautiful
    Were the lines
    So haunting
    And mysterious
    Was the flow
    That I
    Gladly
    Travelled
    To read it again
    And again
    And again
    And again

    A beautiful peace J-poet :)

    *always*
     
  4. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    now I remember

    what I missed about your flow...
    its intense fluidity and how it holds the reader in complete captivity!

    thank you!

    A
     
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    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Write the words Poet...write the words.

    BE
     
  6. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Jaayyyyyy!!!!

    1st... WELCOME HOME POET!! :wave:

    2nd... i see you are still just as tyght
    & smoove as eva!! :) i loved this... &
    i read it twice just because i liked the
    feel of the floooowwww....

    NothinButLove...
    Sunshyne~
     
  7. jahvandus

    jahvandus Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the warm welcome ya'll!!! Alyce, that's a name I hadn't heard from in a while. What happened to our collabo...smile! one love

    jah
     
  8. poeticdelight

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    Tight Flow

    very much so
     
  9. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nice...very, very, very nice....
     
  10. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is heavy...I'm going back now to reread my reread to comprehend the depth of this. This is nice. If I don't pick up the message per se you will have a question asked. This is tight though, got my mind spinning on the various angles.

    one love,blak
     
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