Spoken Word : The Fear

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There is a tiny part of me
that holds a hint of jealousy
I treat it as a fallacy
but it has become a part of me
I'm nervous it will dominate
and this hint will slowly procreate
to a full grown fear of lies and deception
my confidence won't be my protection

I'll isolate myself and think my own thoughts
and they will burn in me and I'll fall apart
and he won't see that I am broken
and the fear will be a word between us unspoken

So I'll have my twisted assumptions
and it will cause "forever" disruptions
I'll want to put in trust
I'll want to believe
but the fear of rejection
will stay sewn on my sleeve
it won't leave
it will be a constant
the fear will make me despondent
make me long to end the painful ride
make me contemplate suicide
and all the while from him I'll hide....
the fear.
 
The Fear
There is a tiny part of me
that holds a hint of jealousy


This piece was very good. Good is an understatement. I liked how it divided itself from the beginning it continued the division showing how a little fear can snowball into other dimension, that though a personal thought, was able to bring the reader into their own process and claim the piece somewhat. I like how each line never abandoned the other and that somehow the piece appears entirely edited in that there is nothing to change, since it flowed well. Of course you as a writer can always let your work evolve into anything you want. It was a pleasure to read. it also speaks to the maximum tragedy of what fear can make us do and yet it begs to hope for better things. It is definately a thought grabber.
 

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