Black Poetry : the fall

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  1. mizdee2002

    mizdee2002 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i wanted desperately to luv u
    but u wouldn’t let me
    i could feel the fall
    free floating
    wind rushing against my face
    slow motion
    slow burn
    slow drag
    my luv gone asunder...
    perpetually lost
    in the chaos
    of your smile
    enveloped in the
    sweetness of your kisses
    lost
    self-induced frustration
    became my way of life...
    u insisted that u couldn’t
    be involved right now...
    well, when then!
    i’m dizzy from
    the home-brewed concoction
    i’ve made
    luv
    wanting desperately to be
    just be
    with u.
    desperation & luv
    is there synergy
    between these 2
    convoluted passions?
    wanting - needing
    to give all
    i am falling
    i wonder if u
    will even attempt
    to catch
    me before
    i hit
    the
    the ground?
     
  2. Reason

    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Let me be the first to say

    That I loved every line!!! Tight work Mizdee!!!

    Much Respect
    Reas
     
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    Mizdee this was TIGHT!!!!! loving the flow...
     
  4. mizdee2002

    mizdee2002 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Reason - thank u for the luv, brutha. i'm glad u were the first to say so!:heart:

    Bishop - i'm still thinking about cures for insomnia!
    :x: thanx for the luv!


    dee:kiss:
     
  5. MsBerry_98

    MsBerry_98 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    **** that sounds familiar...

    good work sistah girl. good work.
     
  6. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mizdee

    Sister gurl, this is nice...so nice...uh huh! The words left their oils on the canvas of my mind.

    Yo sista poet...Joyce
     
  7. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I so move that this piece is tyte!!

    :) Well written scribe poetess! :)

    N2
     
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