Black Poetry : ~THE EXCITEMENT OF YOU~

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by 4EVERLUV, Dec 3, 2008.

  1. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If you only knew what you do

    Indescribable for the common word

    makes me smile when your voice is heard

    the sky seems blue-er and the grass is ever so green

    the air I breathe is refreshing and clean

    excitement causes me to daydream

    of all kinds of intimate and sensual scenes

    I’ve even noticed a sexier strut

    when I wear my favorite blue jeans

    kinda feeling like when I was sixteen

    and the boy I had a crush on

    finally noticed me standing by the soda machine

    sometimes I just close my eyes and scream

    as silly as that may seem

    excitement got me wanting to break my routine

    try some foreign and different things

    like letting go of the past

    because tomorrow brings glorious presents

    in handsome 6 foot 2 packages

    excitement got me hangn’ by a string

    anticipating every wonderful thought

    thinking of him brings

    a feeling of multiplied euphoria

    so long to yesterdays tears and fears

    I’m rising each day with exhilarating cheer

    excitement got me floating

    in a different atmosphere

    please stay here excitement

    no matter what you do

    because I am really luving


    THE EXCITEMENT OF YOU
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    You can say dat again .......whewwwwww the thoughts dat just shot through my mind
    justice can't judge it as all my yesteryears gone sometime i ask why did i let it in
    to break my core .......i tell you if i knew then what i know now it would have been
    whewwwww....

    This one got my head spinning cause the EXCITEMENT dat's in my mind got me in
    chilly bumps right now thinking.....if she only knew what's in my head !
     
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    4EverLuv - You have succeeded by injecting breathlessness in the lung's ability to take air in. When that happens, any reader standing in its way will be sucked in by the ensuing gasps. And after "multiplied euphoria", oxygen may be needed. This was without a doubt sensually inspirational with a positive outlook for tomorrow, and that takes talent. I loved it. Namyh
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICHIE$$:
    Somebody got you all open...hehehe
    Head spinn'n huh...hmmm...
    How cute... I am sure she knows
    how you feel, your having difficulty
    hiding it. lol Thank you dear for the
    read and your continued luv.


    Harry:
    I must tell you how your words
    made me smile so....I have so
    much luv and respect for your
    talent that reading your words
    touched me. Thank you so much
    for the read and your sweet words
    of support. You are the best:blowkiss:
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your excitement, excites me to the upmost sis, and your heart speaks volumes ...great piece poet!!
     
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    Foreverluv

    It's a beautiful thing, the beginning...and all the stirrings those feeling bring inside.

    I'm feeling you on this piece.

    Btw, Nikki Giovanni is one of my favorite poetess, it was she and Maya Angelou who inspired me to begin writing.

    I see you appreciate Nikki's talent as well...

    Great write.


    epiphany:heart:
     
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    I am absolutely loving this, your words were like a breath of fresh air. Great flow poetess.
     
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    excitement is contagious

    and your excitement is about to set ablaze the fields around the playground. THANK YOU for your existence...and allowing me to witness your RISE to greatness.
     
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    yea

    they were my favorites too lol

    hahaha

    listen you laid this down so lovely

    it made me blink

    TWICE!

    dang girl

    this is hot

    any man would be proud

    and i hope he WOULD then make you proud

    :hearthis:
     
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