Black Poetry : The Demon Chase #1

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The Demon Chase #1

At a table at the party has an able body but its time
To leave an abnormal condition of affairs left blind
Frictions in the airs started to think divine as I drink wine
It was mostly fright on this ghostly night low on petro and
Must go through the ghetto, concerned about my mission
Turned on the ignition down hearted and corrupt with vision
The car started up got collision from Geico not a psycho by
No means, the demons are screaming for the seventh key try
Bring back the world of darkness I hold number seven it’ll fry
The hand of devil he can’t stand on the level with Christ eye
Of the beholder inside the key the blood of god I’m thug at odds
So my Ebonics are bizaare, being chased by a demonic car like todd
Bridges I have to live Different strokes and meet magnificent folks
That’s willing to help in this fight, dang ran out of gas and the man
In the demonic car is approaching fast I blocked the road to take a stand
Lock and load my M16 to kill them mean demons oh **** my door stuck
Need some hardcore luck jumped out the window wanna go to Star buck
When this is over be nice it’s hard being a soldier of Christ and now sing
A hym in my heart need an abundance of good things wearing hood bling
jump out the window and somehow the car plowed broadside into mine
missing me by three seconds this seventh key must be my weapon the crime
of demons is extensive and expensive my car blew up it was only true luck
I escaped this fatality being a great reality went by foot to the next town life up
For grabs started to look around what’s been revealed so far is that I must steal
A car
 
no limit to my spree because I have an acedemic degree and my vowels thirst like the bowels of the earth my quotes lame and i hope it rain I'm stealth like B52's from the depth of the seas with crews ,schools cats with strategy by using the rules from the academy better use tools to replace your battery you not no energizer bunny and I'm wiser than the average dummy
 
wear bling and like a king I accede to the throne plus read at home and this feed my dome soI'mstrong in HIPHOP and stay ready to rip shop while my flavor drip drop into microphones a psycho alone like Norman Bates I'm waiting for mother and devastating as a brother, in rhymes i slip a lot but at the tip top so i step on roofs and accept the truth and have left proof at rap concerts and the crowd clap alert tothe crap and dirt but none of that is in my work admit been a jerk in the past but now see a chick starting to flirt some *** as she pass she's got breasts and hips and i want access to her lips "look boo i have a motor car and its a Toyota bizaare it will crank up solets go ona great date i want some cake real bad"
 
This is an example where URBAN ESKIMO is jacking off on my rhymes because he can’t write his own, he read this and was affected by feelings and decided to steal them, him being a white boy said oh CALFSKIN is black I can do this and that is the reason B-BOYS should fire this piece of dead wood here in HIPHOP this white boy don’t have sense enough to give credit where credit is do, this whiteboy don’t have the sense god gave a mosquito, this white boy can’t maintain in reason his brain is out of season this white boy is ambitious of attention when he can only entertain monkeys why would any girl kiss this white bozo? Come on ladies he’s a jack off going to black concerts as a whack jerk that can’t face reality he can’t write rhyme but yet this white idiot thinks he’s good, this whiteboy couldn’t cause a chemical reaction if doctor Jekyll and Mister Hyde helped him, this dumb white boy couldn’t listen to a teacher if he sit in a classroom, look if I gave this white boy a knife he couldn’t peel and orange, if you give this dumb white boy a pay check he’ll be too stupid to sign the back of it and this ***** wouldn’t get paid

http://www.b-boys.com/forums/showthread.php?t=16752&page=4 a white boy stealing rhymes from black folks
 
on another site dang messing around here thought i had lost my touch but no

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The Demon Chase #1

At a table at the party has an able body but its time
To leave an abnormal condition of affairs left blind
Frictions in the airs started to think divine as I drink wine
It was mostly fright on this ghostly night low on petro and
Must go through the ghetto, concerned about my mission
Turned on the ignition down hearted and corrupt with vision
The car started up got collision from Geico not a psycho by
No means, the demons are screaming for the seventh key try
Bring back the world of darkness I hold number seven it’ll fry
The hand of devil he can’t stand on the level with Christ eye
Of the beholder inside the key the blood of god I’m thug at odds
So my Ebonics are bizaare, being chased by a demonic car like todd
Bridges I have to live Different strokes and meet magnificent folks
That’s willing to help in this fight, dang ran out of gas and the man
In the demonic car is approaching fast I blocked the road to take a stand
Lock and load my M16 to kill them mean demons oh **** my door stuck
Need some hardcore luck jumped out the window wanna go to Star buck
When this is over be nice it’s hard being a soldier of Christ and now sing
A hym in my heart need an abundance of good things wearing hood bling
jump out the window and somehow the car plowed broadside into mine
missing me by three seconds this seventh key must be my weapon the crime
of demons is extensive and expensive my car blew up it was only true luck
I escaped this fatality being great a reality went by foot to the next town life up
For grabs started to look around what’s been revealed so far is that I must steal
A car




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01-05-2011, 01:18 AM #2 (permalink)
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mos def feelin this one kid i like to see other people post for real i like to check out other people **** too not jus only mine..good flow good topic//keep it 10 son
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01-05-2011, 12:53 PM #3 (permalink)

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wow chase that's the first tie i got a ten on any post thanks for the props on this one for real



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01-05-2011, 05:48 PM #4 (permalink)
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yea man, real ****. good to see tht not everyone has succumbed to mainstream 10/10


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01-05-2011, 09:49 PM #5 (permalink)

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thanks for the props myke really appreciate that



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01-05-2011, 09:53 PM #6 (permalink)
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good stuff bro
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01-05-2011, 10:33 PM #7 (permalink)

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THANKS GODsGeneral FOR THE REALNESS



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01-05-2011, 10:41 PM #8 (permalink)
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no problem homie...if someone could please vote on my battle..its in the battle area..its against lyricalpriest, and he wrote my name as GOD'sgenital so..look for that...dont worry i killed him for saying that..
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01-06-2011, 11:49 AM #9 (permalink)

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OK will do probably be tonight but will peep it put the link up


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01-06-2011, 12:02 PM #10 (permalink)
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**** I'ma have to start checkn the battles again. God's genitals thats funny even he had ta admit it.

Now fa rhymebad, yea man this was better than the last one, better structure, flow still seemed off at points but it probably sounds better than it reads. Had some decent imagery in there too, everyone expects to win in their stories its gud ta see u at least had troubles along the way, like the car door. And I liked how u re-referenced the key as bein wut saved u cuz it brought an exuberance to wut mite have normally seemed predictable. Gud ****.

Thanks again fa peepin my joint-Cash on Decc, feel free to hit up one of the other 2 also. Links are in da sig. Again, Gud Look.
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01-09-2011, 10:35 AM #11 (permalink)
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dats som straight up gangsta ****
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01-09-2011, 08:13 PM #12 (permalink)

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thanks for the props on this one for real yall



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01-10-2011, 11:18 AM #13 (permalink)
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**** i like it
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01-11-2011, 11:23 PM #14 (permalink)

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Thanks for the props for real everybody i must do a part 2 on this here


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01-11-2011, 11:31 PM #15 (permalink)
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lol...what up rhymebad this ****'s cool. you got good vocab. My deal with this, as with most people on this board, your lines are stretched, man. Write this to a beat, rap it out loud, and it'll come together a little more smoothly. A decent flow is the key to having something hit a whole lot harder. Otherwise you got good **** man. Just condense the flow and it'll all be on point. Keep it up. 1
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thanks ace and alll else for critique and props



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