Black Poetry : The day in question

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by ladybug, Jan 23, 2004.

  1. ladybug

    ladybug Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The sun impregnates the leaves with its rays
    bringing the beautiful colors to life

    Kinda the way you do my heart.

    The beautiful mixture warms my face
    and brightens my eyes.

    Similar to the way you grace mine with a smile.

    Then there is the day when it is all overwhelming
    The sun and all of the everyday, breathtaking views that I appreciate
    gets all so bright
    and I can't see through the light.

    My vision gets blurred
    and the familiar is out of sight

    Like the day you asked me to be your wife...
     
  2. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this line is just so tight
    "The sun impregnates the leaves with its rays
    bringing the beautiful colors to life"
    the whole poem is beautiful...do your thing
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    so sweet colorful and well done ...tyte scribe flow on
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So vividly beautiful, wow, you painted this portrait so well.
     
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