Black Poetry : The Date

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by geegee, Mar 10, 2005.

  1. geegee

    geegee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My body was numb....LIFELESS
    My mind was blank....LOST
    My eyes grew COLD,

    He was strong and his face was filled with hate.
    My whole life felt like it was dying before my eyes,
    ..........Ripped away inch by inch......

    His hands were big and willing to do anything against my will,
    AND IT DID.
    My heart was filling up with hate and rage,
    ........Quickly by the second........

    I became weak and helpless,
    As I was forced to know that you can't trust anyone.
    His eyes became mad and evil, loving every moment of this cruelty.
    While he is holding me down against my will,
    I finally came to the understanding that i just lost
    the
    right
    to
    my
    BODY!!!!
     
  2. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow! that is really all I can say. this piece really blew me away, loved the ending
     
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    info-moetry STAFF STAFF

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    peace,

    I don't know whether to get mad or clap at your powerful scribe.........nicely done, butr I pray it's not true.............

    stay strong geegee..................

    peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dates today are not as they once was
    today you have the worse wit sweet voice
    them they move fast like a snake to take away
    a woman choice sadly tale to the date
    who has the rite to her soul ! NO ONE , NO ONE.

    file charges .....well felt yet leave a bitter taste
     
  5. geegee

    geegee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks...no this isn't about me..i had a friend that experienced this and i decided to write about it...thanks for the comments!
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Great drop :welldone:
     
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    perfectly stated...

    I am inclined to second this reply...

    Very well written!
     
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    Nisa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What was once innocent..has now sometimes become a matter of life or death. Nice piece..thanks
     
  9. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    it was gripping
    it held me...
    nicely done....
    very nice...
    (glad it wasn't you...sorry for those that have been thru it tho...)
     
  10. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...a hit home to reality. Good post...
     
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