Black Poetry : the darker side of lyfe (Pt.2 of the ramblin trilogy)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by the_story, Dec 12, 2003.

  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoremongers stalk the shadows
    making ends meet by sellin crack
    and stabbin prostitutes with corruption
    little boy blu cried because mama
    done shot herself in the head
    and angels didn't come get her
    to take her to heaven....


    children lock themselves
    in rooms snortin addictions
    that molest and rape there souls
    till they are no more....

    police ride up and down streets
    beating blackmen on the
    heads with nightsticks
    because they feel
    riding a mercedes
    is just too good for
    a ******....

    can we really say that
    america is the land
    of the free

    and the home of the brave?

    fallen angels
    rose from the soil
    to take some child
    molester to their
    own little hell....

    men jump in crimson
    rivers that blanket
    there bodies
    and make their
    souls cold....

    brains are hollow
    and are as flemsy
    as cardboard....

    hands are quik
    to fondle the
    innocent
    girls chest......

    can we really say that
    america is land of the free,

    and home of the brave?
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes baby girl, flow on. if it is comin from your heart, none can be too raw. just speak it, i want to hear more
     
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    this is a nice drop
    eyes wide open
    let it flow
    Peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    da reality of the hood and feelin it too
    flow head as the feel come to u
     
  5. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the feedback.....and flow on i shall....
    :heart:
    -story :coffee:
     
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    Yes this is on point.

    U can never be 2 raw if reality is really raw.

    As long as this **** is happening, we have 2 speak upon it.

    Do your thang & let the feeling flow.
     
  7. Alpha Male

    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Re: TO the_story

    Im going to take the time if you don't mind
    To place a spin on this great sh**
    Fourteen year old poet thats not blind
    Masterpiece you have wrote this is it!

    Whoremongers stalk the shadows selling crack
    Stabbing whores with coruptions in the back
    Black child cries because mom shot her own head
    God's angles vist not the mom's deathbed
    To take her to God's wonderful heaven

    Children lock themselves in filthy dark rooms
    Acting moms role while wearing mom's costumes
    Snortin addictions that molest and rape
    Souls recorded on God's videotape
    Souls not going to God's wonderful heaven


    Police ride up down american streets
    Policemen hearts are covered with white sheets
    Beating blackmen on the heads with nightsticks
    Blacks in mercedes due to criminal tricks
    Souls not going to God's wonderful heaven


    can we really say that
    america is the land
    of the free

    and the home of the brave?
    Or
    Full of Souls not going to God's wonderful heaven ?
     
  8. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks alpha male, and postivemindset.....i hope u enjoy the rest.....
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WHOA....lil' sister...

    I still can't get over your age...
    you're like a poetic prodigy
    and I mean that in the highest regard
    because this piece...in addition to your
    other works....is/are phenomenal!
     
  10. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :blush: thanks sage, u got me all grinnin ova here :D
    i just try to speak what i see, and what i see....
    :heart:
    -story:coffee:
     
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