Black Poetry : the CoNcEPtiOn... revisted

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  1. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the CoNcEPtiOn... revisited


    Have you ever
    spoken to someone
    for the first time…
    & all you want to
    tell them is how much
    you've missed them?
    You get me that way.
    You are completely
    filling my senses… &
    we've never even touched.
    You are infinitely
    overwhelming me… with
    everything that is brilliant
    everything that is beautiful
    everything that is You!
    You make me—
    ………wonder...
    …..…………ponder...
    question... if I even existed
    before you came.
    When I close my eyes
    I feel You around me…
    & I see
    those eyes… that mouth…
    & without a doubt... I know
    I'll neva be the same.
    You are increasing-ly
    becom-ing everything...
    (that I need or want to know.)
    You are moving me
    in ways that surpass the physical--
    it's intense...
    it's emotional...
    it's mental… spectacular!
    You are completely filling my senses
    ...& I've missed You.


    © SunshyneOrygynals 2000, all rights reserved
     
  2. GYPSYMAN

    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GA

    I am that bruva sittin' in the co-pilot seat witchu on this one GA..in other wordz...I got every line ....I hope the one to whom it was intended will.....supremely executed GA....the red ink elevated it az well...nice touch !

    one
    g-man
     
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    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SunShyne....
    finding your soulmate...with that first look/touch/word..I knew my heart was gone....beautifully said....

    K
     
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    GA...

    You give body to flow...u hear me gurl? You've got a great sense of body...

    You understand the physical-ity ( yeah...dats a word ;) ) of a poem and you always bring the perfect size 8...yeah...the message is tight at the waist..just where it needs to be...and from the middle of prose-ture..everything else just spreads...

    *figure-8*

    :toast:
     
  5. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    G-Man. i should have known that you would be
    the one to "get" the red ink! thank you for sharing
    my vibe on this one... :)

    Shery. that was a supreme compliment comin'
    from you sister dear! :) self-help for others, huh?
    welll... who gon help me?? (lol) thanks for the read!

    KT. thanks for the read!! i'm glad you felt me!
    & i hope the spark that was ignited for you&yours with
    the first look/touch/word... burns foreva! :)

    Hunter. you say the sweetest-most-tyghtest
    things... even in your responses!! :) thank you! you
    always manage to make me see a lil sumthin' extra
    in my work!! like SunRhythms... i won't forget dat one! :)
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Another "GA SunShyne CLASSIC" !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    You starting to mess with my emotions queen. stop it..........nah.....................keep it coming.

    "10"

    verb
     
  7. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    immaculate conception

    and infinte perfection.


    thanks for this.



    sean.

    :spinstar:
    :nuts:
     
  8. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To the Two Seans in My Life... :)

    Verb. now you know it has always been my goal
    to move you... emotionally. :) thank you for reading me...
    You Inspire Me... Great-ly.

    Seany! i am in awe of you... even tho you don't
    believe me when i say that! :) thanks for the read...
    you know i needed you! :wink:
     
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    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    as freely as this piece flows is as beautiful as this piece is. i feel the depth in what this love poetry piece brings. after reading it over and over and over, it still remains just that...beautiful. very well written, dear sweet friend. uhh, but you already know that, ryght? ryght.
     
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    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sunny

    as always you have taken it to another level.






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