Black Poetry : the coldest season

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  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she sit's in the dark now
    veins close to collapsed / operating on
    borrowed time/
    shaking
    ...sitting in a pool of tears
    a cliche'd life
    of
    "her childhood led her to this"
    falls on deaf ears

    she's 35 now

    state came took her kids about two
    years back
    "for the betterment of the kids"

    already weak she fell deeper into
    the abyss of self-hate-pain-loathing

    she was one of the many that state and
    government programs missed when they cast their
    net

    after suckling on the nipple of death
    she repented to herself and cursed God
    for not holding her when she felt she needed him
    most...when she tried to get outside of the boundaries
    of addiction and

    in her coldest season she had no one

    just echos

    (c)2003 blakverb "off da top thinkin"

    *fam i'm rusty forgive me it gets better
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey blakverb...
    message is heard
    not rusty at all
    i feel the pain
    and hurt in this
    very touching flow
    Peace
     
  3. Khasm13

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    tru indeed blak
    nice to see you back
    on da attack...
    peace
    khasm
     
  4. Alizentang

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    The message was definatly heard. Took me back to a very dark place. Thanks for the read! I liked it.:)
     
  5. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it can't get no better than this

    i love your off the top thinkin'...... I miss you





    One
     
  6. PurpleMoons

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    brilliant and heart felt! Rusty? If thats rusty please keep putting it down! I',m loving the rust.
     
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    Time stands still for flow

    Always, good to go!
     
  8. onelove1soul

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    When you write from the heart as you did in this peice, there's no room for rust. Your energies are beautiful in all aspects.
     
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