Black Poetry : The Child Within

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LOOK AT ME
    says she.
    I've been trying to get your
    attention to truly see
    the child within.
    I am tired of being ignored
    tired of having my dreams
    denied...You cannot afford
    to be blinded to my presence any more.
    Take my hands, yes, they're bloody.
    Bloody from trying to claw their way out
    of your prison, so sure, they look ruddy.
    But my hands are your hands
    so my dear, calm your endless fears
    Can you hear me? My voice is hoarse
    from screaming for all those years.
    Piercing screams that should have awakened
    the dead, but failed to even startle you.
    You, who should have used that voice
    to speak your mind, share what you knew.
    But it was safer, or so you thought
    to be akin to the mute.
    Now others feel free to speak about you
    in ways you can't refute.
    Now, see the tears run down my cheeks
    gaze into my weary eyes
    as we weep together
    transfixed, our sorrows hypnotize
    purging us of rivers of disappointment
    and oceans of terror, each turbulent wave
    bringing us closer to Eden's shore
    where we can finally embrace
    the optimism of the past with the hope of
    the future, perhaps now you can honestly face
    the child within.
    If you could only, LOOK AT ME
    says she...
     
  2. PurpleMoons

    PurpleMoons Administrator STAFF

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    That is so beautiful Sister Watz!
    You snatched me up with your words and held me close in your embrace. You sure now how to set a cold heart on fire. The sweet warmnest in this peice has captured my heart!

    BEAUTIFUL!
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To know that the warmness captured your heart means much coming from a poet like you Purplemoons. Thank you so much for that.
     
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    I'm really feeling this one, almost like I can visualise your emotions as part of my own. Tight vibe xxx
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the depth of these emotions flowing is felt inside my own reasons
    tyte drop sis....
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you PoeticAddiction, nice to know you can feel the vibe I tried to express poet.
    Thank you Rich, for feeling the depths of this scribe, appreciated poet.
     
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    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...this was well written and held such emotions...i loved this piece...
     
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    I am so touched by this!!! You took me right along with you too, sister. And I can really relate.
     
  9. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Lovelygoldenone, so nice of you to say sis.
    Good to know that the words touched you gempis, I thank you for that poet.
     
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    The journey inward...
    is what ultimately brings us forward.

    Introspectiv piece sis...
    I could feel and relate to this one.

    Peace & Love,
    Sage
     
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