Black Poetry : The Challenge

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by alyce, Aug 8, 2001.

  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ~my rendition of "fire" and "the telephone ringing"~


    my favorite time of day
    is dusk, and he knows this

    the darkness brings a
    blanket of comfort
    and the chill of the evening
    makes me yearn for
    the heat of us

    my favorite time of day,
    and the angry words we
    exchanged yesterday
    still ring in my ears…

    and it’s cold inside

    I stoke the embers
    in my fireplace and
    a single flame wavers,
    uncertain it should stay...

    my favorite time of day
    is dusk, as the fire grows
    hot upon my face…

    he knows I miss him…
    and the telephone,
    now ringing in my ears,
    is the second
    sound I’ve been
    longing all day
    to hear

    a
     
  2. mojo

    mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ms A,

    loving how you met the challenge. Smoove as butta baybee!

    mojo
     
  3. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sustah A

    Aye Mami ... muy bien amiga!

    I love it, I love it!! Gurl, you just soooooo wonderful & full of passion in erry thang you write!


    You Go Girl!

    One :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    TEL~PHONE LADY

    LOOK AT U
    ITS RINGING LOUD
    YA PICK UP IT'S
    HIM AGAIN!
    U FLOW ON ALYCE:D
     
  5. GYPSYMAN

    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ~A

    U R masterful in your scribe....period.

    one can learn much from you.

    peace
    g-man
     
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