Black Poetry : The breakup poem

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  1. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I woke up this morning and today was the day
    The day that I finally said goodbye to you for the last time
    There is nothing really special about today at all
    But i woke up this morning and knew I was done with you
    Can't believe it's been 9 monthes or 274 days or 6576 hours
    Or 395460 minutes or 23673600 seconds or million moments
    However its counted it been too much of my time wasted
    And I refuse to waste another instant on the likes of you
    Mama didn't raise no fool so I must plead temporary insanity
    Cause for you I compromise all that which I believed in
    Hoping and praying that one day you wake up a different man
    But now i realize that you can't teach an old dog new tricks
    I'm done cause I am sick and tired of being sick and tired
    So goodbye, adios, Au revoir, Arrivederci, or Sala kakuhle
    Whatever language it is spoken in goodbye means the same
    This is the end, I am done, and we are completely through
     
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    dang girl

    you got the numbers down pat lol

    when it's time it's time, you give your all and what do you get in return?

    :kick:

    feeling the release here poet

    the release of a new freedom
     
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    LIKE THAT??

    WELL IF YOU FEEL LIKE THAT THEN, TO THE CURB HE MUST GO..:peace:
     
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    Well if it's time then its time
    You better let him know!!!
    Hot write :)
     
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    hmmm I believe if the dog be 8, 80 or 108, it can be taught, only if he's ready, willing and able to learn... If not, better to let sleeping dogs lye.
    Excellent piece poet, you've awaken to a brighter rainbow :welldone:
     
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    whoaaaa down to the last seconds from the minutes as da hours passby by da days
    guess it's really goodbye.....well say hello to me !
    awesome piece of work wow
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    asimplepoet

    The decision to say that's it is tough. I've been there. You almost have to convince yourself that that's it. No more.

    Good job.

    :)
     
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    ooohhhh...

    a time come when temporary things must end. but the pain of it is never easy.

    peace&manyblessings
     
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    Some goodbyes aren't really goodbyes, they are more like, if you don't do this or say that, then I'll... But then there are those goodbyes, that are final, as painful as that is to admit. Well done poetess.
     
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    Im sorry it has taken so long for me 2 see.
    I wasn't taught the best way 2 be.
    No lessons was I given as a man 2 show love,
    just objects were sistah's 2 fit in my master plan.
    Confusion every which way I turn,
    Do I go with what I feel, or the lessons learned.
    You speak of being tired for tireds sake,
    I say 2 u, come and eat off my plate.
    You say goodbye and I respect that
    One question tho, did u ever try 2 understand the burden on my back
    With all the things Im faced with, I will just say one thing
    With the training that we receieve
    It takes a man time 2 grow
    and see the beauty of the Queens.

    Peace and Blackness
     
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