Black Poetry : The Boy..Inside The Man

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  1. D-Rock

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    I have walked the burning sands;

    Tried to understand, the boy inside the man;

    I've seen a red sky;

    Wished I could stop to pirch and instead, fly;

    Tried to turn the page...

    On a childhood rage;

    While all the while, looking through the bars of my cage;

    I have gazed at an almond moon;

    Battled, to not let the boy, consume;

    Take just a minute and try to realize;

    A soul runs deeper than just through the eyes;

    I smile to you;

    But inside, my soul burns, and I don't know what to do;

    Fuel the flame;

    Or relinquish the pain;

    A burning hell..

    A raging soul...

    Yearning for a peace..

    That the boy has never known;

    Show this man...

    That the world is nothing...

    If not his own.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    one inside us all fo sure , how we tame him teach him and show him da world which he stand
    is da key
    lovin ya flowz bruh !
     
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    $$Rich$$ Thanks man...I'm glad you checkin it out..it's str8 cool when a pensmenship you respect...respects you back...
     
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    I just loved your descriptive language in this!...the "red sky," the "almond moon" :toast:

    And that soul/eyes line was niiice!


    FABULOUS piece!
     
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    D-Rock:

    Profound flow indeed.

    Keep'em coming your on a roll.


    Much luv,

    :heart:EVER
     
  6. D-Rock

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    CherryBlossom Thanks for the love..I love your comments....you are respected

    4EVERLUV Thanks I'm glad you enjoy my flow..I write daily...it's my serenity
     
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    REMEMBERING MY OWN TRANSITION TO MANHOOD....

    THIS PIECE IS WARMING ...


    WARRIOR
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mornin D-Rock...

    I really enjoy reading your work, the strength and sensitivity is stirring... I love poetry that does that.

    Great write!


    feelin'itsouldeep!
    Coco
     
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    CocoButterSkyn Thanks so much that meant alot...One of my strengths has always been my ability to express myself and my emotions.
     
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    I like I like:)
     
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