Black Poetry : The Bottom....

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Mar 30, 2004.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I was going to post this earlier, but didn't cause I thought it was too gloomy, but we've all been here, so here goes...


    Did you ever think
    that you had already been through
    the worse life has to bring,
    only to discover the worse may still await you.
    Well, welcome to the bottom
    The bottom is deeper than any chasm
    darker than the blackest of any midnight
    more destructive than Iraq's missing weapons
    and deadlier than the black widow's bite.
    You don't fall forever in the bottom,
    as the word implies, you do hit.
    It's in the look your children give you
    when you keep wallowing in the same ****.
    There's no light in the bottom.
    You have to feel your way around.
    Don't bother trying to call for help,
    there isn't any sound.
    The bottom starts with a lesion
    then it slowly starts to bleed.
    Soon the wound becomes infested
    and the maggots begin to feed.
    The poison spreads throughout the bottom
    before the antidote can be taken
    Death can't possibly come soon enough,
    God why has my faith been shaken?
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very deep sis..much love
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  3. river

    river Watch Her Flow MEMBER

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    More destructive than Iraq's missing weapons

    hats off!

    Like the queen of Sheba
    This flow is dark and lovely

    I love the last line. If all our dark descents cause us to seek God we will never have to fear the bottom. It is a blessing in disguise.
     
  4. CrystallGlass

    CrystallGlass New Member MEMBER

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    very nice, yes i've been there and I believe its gonna get a lil better as i get older as soon as im 18, things will start lookin up for me
    :lips:





     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    deep scribe
    flow on
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This flow I FEEL
    Your talent and depth just oozes
    I love this one deeply
    Tight write!



    Peace and love
     
  7. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave: Watz...
    I just love scriibings about the dark hole, the blackness, the bottom of the barrel...why ? because it reminds me of where I once been. This is a trip like no other...the louder you :cry: ...the less you're heard...in short...it's "DO or DIE" Sometimes we have to push or force some in that hole just so they can get stronge enough to come up out of it....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was tyte sistah
    i love it when u scribe like this
    flow on
     
  9. mistaliberator

    mistaliberator Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    cant forget whats real

    THE FIGHT HAS JUST STARTED
    FROM THE BOTTOM TO THE TOP
    EVERYTHING NEEDS TO BE SAID AND YOU DID EXACTLY THAT
     
  10. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the love Bluewater.
    Thankyou for the praise river, and yes, I believe this was a blessing in disguise.
    CrystallGlass, positive thinking, no reason why things shouldn't look up for you, thank you and welcome to the forum!!
    Mzblkangel, thankyou for your support on this.
     
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