Quiet Poetry Lounge : The Boiling Point

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Jul 9, 2004.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Emotions
    My emotions
    I poured them in slowly, carefully
    letting go of prior notions
    of getting third degree burns
    I was laid back at first,
    set to a slow simmer
    taking the experience as it came
    Before I realized it, there was a glimmer
    of hope, perhaps wishful thinking...
    maybe even a gift, heaven sent
    To my surprise, the troubled waters
    began to change their element.
    The vapors started to rise, as my
    demeanor shifted from calm to enraptured.
    Temperature, rising
    churning emotions, captured
    Egg shell sensitivities
    close to over flowing
    for I have reached the boiling point
    in my heart, in my mind, knowing
    full well that I have to get my soul
    under control....
    Do I turn the heat down
    so the waters can be still,
    or do I let the feelings evaporate?
    Either way, I need to chill
    And I will
    so that I can get beyond
    the boiling point.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sometime once the water get hot things boil and burn
    but turn the heat down will cool off if it sit long enough
    it will evaporate in air ........well felt scribe
     
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    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i swear, every time i read one of your poems, i'm like d*mn
    this is awesome...
    i feel you on this 'boiling point'
    seems like a place i've been before

    please keep writing...
     
  4. watzinaname

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    Thank you for catching this vibe Rich, and hearing my voice.
    I appreciate your kind words 7thPoet, thank you for feeling my poetry.
     
  5. daroc

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    i was feelin this one watz.... i loved the way u related ur emotions to the different lifestyles of heat..
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad to know you dug the style of this, I was trying to do something a little different. Thanks daroc.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I've been at that boiling point too, sister, but oooooo, you just put the oo in smooth. :cool: Diggin on this.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you gempis, I dig your smooth poetry as well sis.
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love this line...
    and Sister...I can so relate
    that boiling point is so hard to
    control and so hard to cool once
    it's heated...

    This has been, yet another Phenomenal Flow...by Watz :jumping:
     
  10. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    i liked this watz..
    twas different...controlled
    descriptive...
    the nice thing is when it boils
    it gives off steam...which is a
    natural cleanser to the bod
    and then ..
    evaporates into the air..

    i like that you keep exploring your form..../the form.....form
     
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